Some people believe that currently people are seriously focusing on buying expensive suits and vehicles, because they think these possessions can be judged importantly in social relationships. I also agree with this idea and would like to explain why people are interesting in buying these things.
First, the first impression is very important in people’s relationships and is easily judged by their fashion and cars. It is a reality that most people regard expensive clothes and luxury cars as the symbol of success and richness, even though this prejudice comes from luxury material company’s marketing. For example, I saw many cases that well-dressed people have better service than casual dress ones, so I also try to wear expensive clothes when I go shopping to a department store for this reason.
Second, I think that this addiction of buying luxury goods for their appearance is not a bad consumption habit compared to other addictions such as gambling, violence, drugs and so on. This phenomenon does not affect directly to other lives. In addition, this consumption of rich people can be helpful to boost an economy. For instance, I also used to be interested in fashion in my early 40s and spend much money to buy some luxury brand clothes for my satisfaction and better appearance. Even though now I realize that it was not so helpful to upgrade my career and it was over-consumption compared to my income, but I learned a lot how to spend money efficiently through the time and experience.
To sum up, due to increasing importance of appearance and first impression, people are more catched about luxury garments and cars, but it is natural trend in this modern society. Also, this purchasing for their looking is rather sound spending, compared to other serious additions. In this regard, I support the idea that people are more addictive in purchasing luxury possessions, due to other’s judge.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 263, Rule ID: BE_INTEREST_IN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'interested'?
Suggestion: interested
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, look, second, so, well, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1608.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 317.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07255520505 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84988145004 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567823343849 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4781412341 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.692307692 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3846153846 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.38461538462 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272420299308 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.099451582236 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0633045941298 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178017953861 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0763596863734 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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