telephone or tv
In modern days, people rely on many technologies, like telephone, television and so on, in order to do their routines. Even though the TV programs influence a lot of aspects of human beings life as follows, getting news, general information, amusement and so forth; but, I, personally, think the telephone is more important in peoples life. It cause get communication easily and do the services of emergencies. It also prepare a convenient way to order products and requirement like booking restaurants, hotel and other such things.
In the first place, accessing to telephone, people will be able to get communication, with everyone wanted, without any restriction of time and distance. They can do their business, friendships, common tasks and more of the same. It is not to mention that in every individual's life, some emergencies will be happen in which they need others' help. In these condition if there isn’t any access to telephone, they would be frustrated and even sometimes maybe encounter with perils and danger. In the opposite lacking of TV will not cause noticeable harms, especially they can compensate the lack of television by services of internet, they will be able read news and be up-to-date, and also watch amusement program. For instance, one time I got car broke down on a remote road, I didn’t access to anyone, and I call rapidly Roadside assistance. I don’t know what I could do, if I hadn’t phone.
Secondly, people can use of telephone services for many demands like ordering food, reserving books, booking hotel and so, by which human beings will live more convenient and help them to save time. They can manage their time and be punctual more and more with telephone services. For instance, as an employee who is going to go vacation some days later, is working in their enterprise, he or she can use telephone services and book a hotel and restaurant for the exact time they want; order the travel equipment; rent car; and so on.
In summary, in my opinion, the services and influences of telephone is not comparable with those of television. In many case, telephone has not any substitute, in the opposite TV-programs can get by internet. Telephone give opportunity to people in order to communicate, handle emergencies, do their routine and so on.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 184, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'beings'' or 'being's'?
Suggestion: beings'; being's
...ams influence a lot of aspects of human beings life as follows, getting news, general ...
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Line 1, column 345, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'causes'?
Suggestion: causes
...e is more important in peoples life. It cause get communication easily and do the ser...
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Line 1, column 420, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'prepares'?
Suggestion: prepares
...do the services of emergencies. It also prepare a convenient way to order products and ...
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Line 2, column 265, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...ame. It is not to mention that in every individuals life, some emergencies will be happen i...
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Line 4, column 115, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun case seems to be countable; consider using: 'many cases'.
Suggestion: many cases
...comparable with those of television. In many case, telephone has not any substitute, in t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, even so, for instance, in summary, in my opinion, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1922.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00520833333 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91543407735 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546875 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2235404896 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.058823529 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5882352941 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88235294118 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181857594949 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0640360552229 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0869048863974 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149469117515 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115315988769 0.0645574589148 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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