Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.

Essay topics:

Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.

There is huge discussion on television advertisement targeting young children's. Some people have opinion that very small children's won't have sense to judge between right and wrong and they influence by Advertisement. I think otherwise that commercials broadcast on television should not be censored.

Televisions are not only source of advertisement, there are many other ways of advertisement some are really more approachable to young children's approach i.e when kids go and play or do any other activity on web site they might see the advertisement of foods and toys.

In Addition, rather than ban on advertisement on television we should guide our children what is good for them so that they can judge advertisement by their own way.

There is many other movies and serials which are telecasting on television which are not good for young children but they allow to telecast and parents are controlling their kids so they won't watch them.Controlling the kids is the task of parent. Parents should take the responsibility of their children about what they should watch and what they won't allow.

Finally i am concluding my statement that children's can influence by another ways as well i.e. what their friends are doing they try to do the same. Instead of ban on advertisement we should guide them to judge what is good for them. I mean kids should learn to judge if it is worth to buy the product that is being advertised.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 210, Rule ID: WEB_SITE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'website'?
Suggestion: website
...go and play or do any other activity on web site they might see the advertisement of foo...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 129, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'telecasting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: telecasting
... good for young children but they allow to telecast and parents are controlling their kids ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 204, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Controlling
...ling their kids so they wont watch them.Controlling the kids is the task of parent. Parents...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...ould watch and what they wont allow. Finally i am concluding my statement that child...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 9, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ch and what they wont allow. Finally i am concluding my statement that childre...
^

Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'if', 'really', 'so', 'well', 'i mean', 'i think', 'in addition']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.204724409449 0.229887763892 89% => OK
Verbs: 0.216535433071 0.158761421928 136% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0787401574803 0.0866891130778 91% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0590551181102 0.046263068375 128% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0866141732283 0.0685040099705 126% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.110236220472 0.118717715034 93% => OK
Participles: 0.0354330708661 0.0351676179071 101% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.9496500807 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0275590551181 0.0309702414327 89% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0393700787402 0.0887237588012 44% => Some determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0354330708661 0.0209618222197 169% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0433070866142 0.0139019557991 312% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1434.0 2387.08602151 60% => OK
No of words: 241.0 408.028673835 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.95020746888 5.86048508987 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94007293032 4.48200974243 88% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.261410788382 0.338922669872 77% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.211618257261 0.251872472559 84% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.165975103734 0.174417080927 95% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.141078838174 0.112833075102 125% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9496500807 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 212.727598566 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526970954357 0.524397521467 100% => OK
Word variations: 49.651854822 59.2087087015 84% => OK
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6684587814 53% => OK
Sentence length: 21.9090909091 20.5533526081 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.4095659886 48.84282405 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.363636364 120.699889404 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9090909091 20.5533526081 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.818181818182 0.644075263715 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 43.0709166352 45.7405998639 94% => OK
Elegance: 0.967391304348 1.45489161554 66% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150404685735 0.300154397459 50% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.107124564263 0.103427244359 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0981152744747 0.0752933317313 130% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.628421683349 0.497263757937 126% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.224380115697 0.151897553556 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0760902437248 0.114077575197 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0478294980977 0.0781384742642 61% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.201476593041 0.336927656856 60% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0627722972162 0.067059652881 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.097389597606 0.210909579961 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323169266533 0.0618886996521 52% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8870967742 59% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.91756272401 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 7.0 8.42114695341 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 11.0 13.6433691756 81% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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