A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.Write a letter to the com

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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter
describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir/Ma'am,

I am writing to give my opinion on - either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years or to pay for two open-air concerts- the company seeking feedback from the local population. I am the resident of this locality since my childhood, and I know the enthusiasm and talent; children's of our community have. They are desperate for football and some of the players playing so admirably. company decision for finance the sport's team for two years will give many of them the podium to manifest themselves. Although, the decision to finance for the concert is also respectable in order to entertain the public who won't much enjoy the sports.

As per my opinion, I would like to give my preference to sponsoring a sports team for two years. This will boost the confidence and the future opportunity for children's, which is most required rather than the entertainment.

I look forward to hearing back from you, and whatever is your decision is respectable, but I voted for sports team sponsorship.

Yours truly,
Pallavi

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 361, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ve. They are desperate for football and some of the players playing so admirably. company d...
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Line 3, column 403, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Company
...me of the players playing so admirably. company decision for finance the sports team fo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 32.9175257732 58% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 26.3917525773 72% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 886.0 937.175257732 95% => OK
No of words: 177.0 206.0 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00564971751 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64748333727 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87003332321 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.61581920904 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 261.9 290.88556701 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7254844974 44.8134815571 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.4444444444 76.5299724578 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 16.8248392259 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.22222222222 4.34317383033 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.424913935935 0.216113520407 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.159161998991 0.0766984524023 208% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127336595212 0.0603063233224 211% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257177947808 0.12726935374 202% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104685713775 0.0580467560999 180% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 8.37731958763 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 70.7449484536 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 8.71597938144 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 7.59969072165 111% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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