Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time Others say that it is important for children to learn how to preoccupy themselves Discuss both these views and and give your opinion

Essay topics:

Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to preoccupy themselves.
Discuss both these views and and give your opinion.

Every parent wants to raise children who happy and successful. Someone vibe that parents should motivate their child organization task when their relaxation hours and whereas others emphasize that free turn children knowledge capture themselves. This essay will discuss both the reason in details and I believe that organization task and self-learning are needed to the succession.
On the one hand, education besides schoolboys needs group work because of a quick solution. Everyone does not know everything that why is needed for team actions. For example, my cousin Jon, who is a national football team player reason owing to play the local team when he was a school going. Furthermore, group activities grow up leadership and confidence and this is indispensable for the future like a business and any job.
Nevertheless, on the other hand, undoubtedly part of organized teamwork important and self-activities vital role-playing for careering both passing free time. Parents will know their child's weak point of education side when they are increasing self-learning when get leisure time, improving skilled communication of the internet. For instance, the current pandemic situation, most of all stay home and children learn their computer and language by google. So, they are developed to occupy themselves is a better opportunity when getting an ideal time.
In conclusion, this essay discussed that leisure moment involves in any organization work are growing up leadership how to complete a job and self-learning promoting skilled like communication development. In my personal opinion, for improving future need to activities both sides attach with team and self-learning in leisure time.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 212, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'opinion'.
Suggestion: opinion
...d like communication development. In my personal opinion, for improving future need to activitie...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, furthermore, nevertheless, so, whereas, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1448.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 261.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.54789272031 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06079673961 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.616858237548 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0006494392 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.384615385 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0769230769 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.30769230769 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266033174698 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0898255706546 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0573604099418 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15864975302 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0692770783964 0.056905535591 122% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.91 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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