Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Some people believe that gurdians should motivate juveniles to participate in organised group activities in their spare time. However, some people argue that it is necessary for kids to get busy themselves on their own. Although leaving children on their own to learn something creative and to recognise their cognitive skills is always a good idea, guidance of elders are more important to youngster to utilise their time and to shape their careers at early stage of their life.
On the one hand, It is a fact that parents are always concerned for their kids in regards of their learnings and new skills development; this is why, they are suggesting to participate in group or social activities, such as sports and arts. Guidance of elders is more important for kids to enlighten their paths because sometimes juveniles cannot think of anything on their own to be done in their spare time. Hence, in this way, parents can save their kids time to utilise it in some effective way.
In addition, participating in group activities help developing social skills, which is nowadays absolutely relevant in growing kids. By participating in the group activities, namely sports and arts, children can enhance their public speaking and presentation skills. Certainly, it also helps them to spread their presence and increase social networks. For example, it has been seen that pupils, who have been involved in group activities, are the happier and cheerful than other kids because they learn new skills fastly, and earn real and new friends more easily.
On the other hand, sometimes youngster need to leave on their self to get occupied themselves, truthfully, to develop their cognitive skills. It is a good practice to learn from the mistakes, but if a child would not be left alone to make those mistakes, how it would give them a chance to correct it by themselves. This process of repetition helps them to recognise the main Idea, and hence, strikes on their cognitive skills enhancement. Moreover, in this way, juveniles do not feel pressurized by their parents to do some particular activities, which is not as per kids interests. Imposing activities, which do not attract children, can result in their declining academic performancs. However, if they are left alone, more chances are that they can involve themselves in wrong practices. For instance, in many cases, pupils get indulge themselves in some immoral activities, such as smoking, watching porns, and using excessive social media, since early start of their lives without parental guidance.
To conclude, leaving youngsters on their self to learn new skills from their creative ideas are indeed a good practice to do, but there is a high chance that juveniles may indulge themselves in some wrong practice due to lack of parental guidance. This is why, elders are important to exist in our life; without their support and guidance, children cannot utilise their effort and time in a progressive way. Also, not forgetting that participating in a group or social activities develop a child more effectively.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 80, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
...nts are always concerned for their kids in regards of their learnings and new skills developm...
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Line 3, column 118, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'skills'' or 'skill's'?
Suggestion: skills'; skill's
...s in regards of their learnings and new skills development; this is why, they are sugg...
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Line 5, column 53, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to develop' or 'develop'.
Suggestion: to develop; develop
... participating in group activities help developing social skills, which is nowadays absolu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, in many cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 24.0651302605 249% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 41.998997996 169% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2576.0 1615.20841683 159% => OK
No of words: 504.0 315.596192385 160% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11111111111 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.20363070211 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71563133822 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446428571429 0.561755894193 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 794.7 506.74238477 157% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.8522051545 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.8 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.392639735286 0.244688304435 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136065587321 0.084324248473 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0780419346886 0.0667982634062 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264159239451 0.151304729494 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0914075894105 0.056905535591 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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