Some pp say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
There has been an increasing debate as to whether children should be encouraged to participate in organised group activities or they should be free to choose their activities on their own in their free time. In this essay, I will shed some light on both the views and give my opinion.
To begin with, there are many reason which is essential for children to participate in some organised group activities on there leisure time. First of all, these activities is an ideal occasion for them to have new relationships with both new people and their friends from different cultural backgrounds. Humans are social beings and hence interacting with other children is vital for their mental well being. Moreover, these kind of activities contain some skills which may be crucial for any children so that they can achieve success in their life. For instance, teamwork is the common skill for any children if they have a chance to participate in these collective activities.
However children also needs some spare time alone to rise their their certain quantities which are difficult to achieve when being occupied with others because of some reason. The primary reasons of its is that they need to be independent in choosing their activities on their free time. It gives them the freedom of thought and children learn to take up challenges and responsibilities. In addition, children should spend time developing in their leisure like painting, poetry, reading and many more. It is particularly useful when they want to relax and have a break from stressful schoolwork or job demands in the future when they grow up.
I believe that parents should give equal importance to their children to participate in group activities as well as encourage them to be productive when they are alone. For instance, there should be activities like sports, dance , scouting and threatres, which can help children not only in attaining the skill but also learn social and communication skills. In addition to this, children need to spend some quality time alone to discover themselves and be productive. Being alone helps children to be creative as boredom leads to creativity. If they learn to enjoy on their own, children will remain occupied, which keep them away from depression due to loneliness.
To conclude, parents must encourage and guide their children to be active in group activities as well as learn to enjoy time alone by doing productive work. By doing so, children will get a chance to develop themselves, and they get equipped to face challenges life throws on them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: whether
There has been an increasing debate as to whether children should be encouraged to partic...
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...e my opinion. To begin with, there are many reason which is essential for children to part...
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... for their mental well being. Moreover, these kind of activities contain some skills which...
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...cipate in these collective activities. However children also needs some spare time alo...
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...to face challenges life throws on them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, as to, for instance, in addition, kind of, as well as, first of all, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 24.0651302605 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2140.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 426.0 315.596192385 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0234741784 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69657665359 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481220657277 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 657.0 506.74238477 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.272347585 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.631578947 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4210526316 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.63157894737 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.432272302313 0.244688304435 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155226744169 0.084324248473 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0893173945979 0.0667982634062 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.28657692949 0.151304729494 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0788003960054 0.056905535591 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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