Some people enjoy taking risks and trying new things. Others are not adventurous; they are cautious and prefer to avoid danger. Which behavior do you
think is better? Explain why?
There are two type of people adventurous and conservative. The people who want to get success and determined for his goals are always ready to take the risk and learn new things from their past experiences. On the contrary, another group of person who are not ready to face the challenging situations. Some aspects of argument are discussed below.
There are number of reason why some people are willing to take risk .One of the reason they want to promote themselves professionally. From this point , personally, after my graduation I wanted to go abroad to get good job to fulfill my dreams. Now, i realized that was the best decision i had taken in my life ever since. I got a good job and later on I got opportunity to get admission in very good university with scholarship so I could take next steps towards the fulfillment of my dreams. I took a challenging decision and finally, i could find a suitable job whereby my whole life guaranteed. Therefore, my carrier prosperity due to taking risk.
In addition, Taking risk lead us to try new experience or to learn new thing. I have one more personal experience, my sister is very good in dance. At one point of time she had to choose either further studies or further dance carrier. Everyone recommend her to choose engineering as it will less struggling to built her carrier due to existance of many jobs in engineering but she proceed with her hobby and took risk. Her passion allowed her to become a skillful dancer and now she is a successful choreographer with a famous dance industry.
Finally, I prefer to become a adventurous person and fond of taking the risk, because it inspire me to attain my dreams and most important it will give me the chance to learn the new experiences.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 190, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experiences'.
Suggestion: experiences
...he risk and learn new things from their past experiences. On the contrary, another group of pers...
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Line 3, column 68, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...why some people are willing to take risk .One of the reason they want to promote t...
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Line 3, column 70, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: One
...y some people are willing to take risk .One of the reason they want to promote them...
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Line 3, column 151, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...emselves professionally. From this point , personally, after my graduation I wante...
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Line 3, column 251, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...get good job to fulfill my dreams. Now, i realized that was the best decision i h...
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Line 3, column 289, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
..., i realized that was the best decision i had taken in my life ever since. I got ...
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Line 3, column 538, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ook a challenging decision and finally, i could find a suitable job whereby my wh...
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Line 5, column 270, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to engineer'.
Suggestion: to engineer
...rrier. Everyone recommend her to choose engineering as it will less struggling to built her...
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Line 5, column 383, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'proceeds'.
Suggestion: proceeds
...nce of many jobs in engineering but she proceed with her hobby and took risk. Her passi...
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Line 7, column 29, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ndustry. Finally, I prefer to become a adventurous person and fond of taking t...
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Line 7, column 90, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'inspires'?
Suggestion: inspires
...and fond of taking the risk, because it inspire me to attain my dreams and most importa...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'if', 'so', 'therefore', 'in addition', 'on the contrary']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.211940298507 0.229887763892 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.173134328358 0.158761421928 109% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0985074626866 0.0866891130778 114% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0477611940299 0.046263068375 103% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0985074626866 0.0685040099705 144% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.089552238806 0.118717715034 75% => OK
Participles: 0.0208955223881 0.0351676179071 59% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.79258718471 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0597014925373 0.0309702414327 193% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0686567164179 0.0887237588012 77% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0119402985075 0.0209618222197 57% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0119402985075 0.0139019557991 86% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1748.0 2387.08602151 73% => OK
No of words: 310.0 408.028673835 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.63870967742 5.86048508987 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.48200974243 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.312903225806 0.338922669872 92% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.212903225806 0.251872472559 85% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.148387096774 0.174417080927 85% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.112903225806 0.112833075102 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79258718471 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548387096774 0.524397521467 105% => OK
Word variations: 57.5971353084 59.2087087015 97% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6684587814 77% => OK
Sentence length: 19.375 20.5533526081 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5254049955 48.84282405 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.25 120.699889404 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.375 20.5533526081 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.4375 0.644075263715 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.54480286738 198% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 40.6653225806 45.7405998639 89% => OK
Elegance: 1.00934579439 1.45489161554 69% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237730746151 0.300154397459 79% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.130640721781 0.103427244359 126% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0713295175927 0.0752933317313 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.506869583977 0.497263757937 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.176779812082 0.151897553556 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0932652611547 0.114077575197 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635150130666 0.0781384742642 81% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.280330611375 0.336927656856 83% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0310102069018 0.067059652881 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165639579976 0.210909579961 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0533150044219 0.0618886996521 86% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8870967742 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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