As far as I Concern, People have been debating the pros and cons of the statement that trying new adventurous things. Some people like to take challenges and Risks while others trying to play on their own limits. from My personal view point, I strongly agree with group of people who likes to take risks and learn new skills for the following two rationals.
First of all, Taking risk means giving an opportunity to yourself learning new skills. If you take an opportunity to learn new different things at any costs including all risks and dangers, then you can learn that new activity. Take my personal example to illustrate this, I always wanted to do skiing, but as Being Professional medical practitioner, I was aware of all kind of small joint injuries while doing ski. One of my friend is the ski instructor and he forced me to learn skiing. He gave me few free skiing lessons and finally I became master in skiing. Now since last two years, I go for skiing every winter and I have so much fun with my new skill.
The another reason is that sometimes facing challenges will help you to overcome your fear and phobia. I think everyone should try to overcome fear by going through that movement. To illustrate this, I will take my personal example. I remember that I used to be very Claustrophobic few years ago. One day, my family went to summer vacation at the hunter mountain. I had never done hydro zombie, Which is a closed ball with harness attached inside My dad bought very expensive tickets for everybody. He finally convinced me to try Zombie ride. I was very scared at the beginning and felt suffocated for few minutes. Once I started to enjoy the ride. I completely forget about my fear in the closed space. Now I kind of enjoy myself in the closed chamber or space.
All in all, Taking new risks needs to be considered positively in terms of not only learning new skills, but also to overcome all fears. In general, I wholeheartedly believe that the very first thing we should do now is to admit the importance of taking risk and learning new things as the key to open the door of our bleak future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, so, then, while, i think, in general, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1742.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54830287206 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49889776573 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553524804178 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.6149568704 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.1818181818 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4090909091 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09090909091 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21066529909 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581809263552 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0552486639884 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136866667325 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0576328523002 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.81 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.83 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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