Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed
In todays world there are many kinds of television advertisment. Amoung them some are forcuse towards young children. Personally, I agree with the statement wich says television advertising toward young children should not allowed. I feel this way for two main resons, wich I will explore in following essay.
First of all, Some food advertisment makes children to eat out side food. Moreover they advertis that they give new toy with their meals. These food contain lot of oil and harmful chemicals to preserv it. Therefor eating those kind of foods leads children ill. My own experience is a compalling example of this. When I was a kid I have seen lot of KFC television advertisments. So evantually I started loving KFC foods. Therefor I had a habbit of having my dinner at KFC. After one month I got seveyely ill. I got gastrities. That's all because of continuesly eating out side food.
Secondly, Some toy companies they advertise there new toy product. Though they says those toys with good quility are durable and last long, really they are not. The real product is very cheep in condition and it brakes very easy. For instant, when I was small I sow some advertisment of car toy. So I forced my mother to buy it for me. At last some how I got that car toy. But I couldn't use it for a week. It stop working suddenly. The qulity of the car is also very cheep. Accoeding to the TV advertismnet it's well buit. Anyway the advertisment is bout a fake product.
In concution, I strongly belive that TV advertisments direclty target small children is should not allow. Beacuse of the my child hood experience.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'allow'
Suggestion: allow
...tising toward young children should not allowed. I feel this way for two main resons, w...
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Message: Did you mean 'outside'?
Suggestion: outside
...food advertisment makes children to eat out side food. Moreover they advertis that they ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...nt makes children to eat out side food. Moreover they advertis that they give new toy wi...
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Message: Did you mean 'this food' or 'These foods'?
Suggestion: This food; These foods
...hat they give new toy with their meals. These food contain lot of oil and harmful chemical...
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Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'those kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; those kinds
...hemicals to preserv it. Therefor eating those kind of foods leads children ill. My own exp...
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Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rience is a compalling example of this. When I was a kid I have seen lot of KFC tele...
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...ad a habbit of having my dinner at KFC. After one month I got seveyely ill. I got gas...
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...h I got seveyely ill. I got gastrities. Thats all because of continuesly eating out s...
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Message: Did you mean 'outside'?
Suggestion: outside
...Thats all because of continuesly eating out side food. Secondly, Some toy companies...
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Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'say'
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...tise there new toy product. Though they says those toys with good quility are durabl...
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...ced my mother to buy it for me. At last some how I got that car toy. But I couldnt use i...
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Suggestion: couldn't
...last some how I got that car toy. But I couldnt use it for a week. It stop working sudd...
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Message: Did you mean 'stops'?
Suggestion: stops
...oy. But I couldnt use it for a week. It stop working suddenly. The qulity of the car...
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Message: Did you mean 'it'?
Suggestion: it
...tisments direclty target small children is should not allow. Beacuse of the my chi...
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Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'my'?
Suggestion: the; my
...hildren is should not allow. Beacuse of the my child hood experience.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, first, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, well, i feel, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1340.0 1977.66487455 68% => OK
No of words: 285.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70175438596 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68182671353 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610526315789 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 405.0 618.680645161 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 10.0 20.1344086022 50% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 21.9257501675 48.9658058833 45% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 47.8571428571 100.406767564 48% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 10.1785714286 20.6045352989 49% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.60714285714 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 17.0 4.88709677419 348% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188096022949 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0427558863207 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0766017057658 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142294092798 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107824549132 0.0645574589148 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.8 11.7677419355 49% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.25 58.1214874552 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.8 10.1575268817 47% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.5 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.0 10.0537634409 60% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 6.0 10.247311828 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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