Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In todays world advertising is key statergy for sell new items. Every year lot of companies spend huge anount of mony for advertising. This has become a trend these days. I agree with the statement that advertisements make products seem much better than they really are. I feel this way for two main resons, wich I will explore in following essay.
First of all, even the real product doesn't look that good,advertisements use more colourful pictures actractive back ground to actract customers. My own experionce is a compelling example for this. Last year I order a rechargeble touch through online. Before I place the order I check some pictues and advertisements video which was in the website. It showed that it is very bright and one charge will last long for two week or sometimes more. But when I got the touch, I realized that it is not bright as they say and the battery will run for three days after full charge.
Secondly, companies they advertise their product saying that their products are durable and sutable for havy duty. But actually when we use them we realizs that how much they are durable and sutable for havy duty. For instant, Once I saw advertisement on TV about a mobile phone. It said that that phone is having a rubber coted outer layer for it's protection. And also they advertis that phone is dust and water resist. Therefor it is sutable for any kind of rough use. Since I working in a construction company I usually I work with dust and water. So I thought this phone is sutable for me. Then I bought this phone and start using it. After some weeks I saw some dust pachches inside the sreen. One mothe later I saw some water bubles on the screen as well. But according to the advertisement that phone is dust and water proof.
In conclution, I strongly belive that advertisements make products seems much better than actually they are. This is because of my own experienc I had in last few years about a touch and a cell phone.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, look, really, second, secondly, so, then, well, i feel, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 52.1666666667 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1625.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61647727273 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58869023809 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5625 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.3846672428 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 65.0 100.406767564 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.08 20.6045352989 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 18.0 4.88709677419 368% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180586730621 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.055050502488 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111903260964 0.0737576698707 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137394808069 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0734917294076 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 11.7677419355 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.92 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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