Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that one of the most important ways of selling a product more, is an advertisement. Some people believe that companies want their products to seem much better than what they are. Others hold the position that advertisers do not exaggerate on their programs and treat fairly. I, personally, am inclined to the former one and believe that advertisements make products seem in a better way in comparison with what they are. In the following paragraphs, I explain my reasons to clarify my viewpoint.
The first reason which comes to my mind is that the goal of the advertising is to sell more. Companies spend a large amount of money to let them products be known for people and they expect to have more demand for their commodities. Therefore, advertisers should persuade people to buy the product by showing them the good features of it. commonly, inappropriate quality of a product is neglected and useful characteristics are accentuated. In this way, people who watch the advertisement will be more familiar with the benefits of the products and will compel to provide them for themselves. Therefore, the company will reach its aim of spending money on introducing its product.
Another reason which deserves being mentioned here is that there is a lot of similar products available to people. People should make a decision that which of them they want and which is more suitable for their needs. Consequently, the company wants to show that its product is better than others and give a guarantee to the customers that are the best choice for them. The company, with advertising, wants to handle the market and do not let their rivals to sell more than them. For example, there is two big car factory in my country. The car which they produce has a lot of faults and some global standards have not been considered during their designs. Although, in the TV advertisement, both of them just focus on their new options and convenient facilities and do not mention about the real situation of the cars. None of them want to lose competence and tell the truth in their advertisements.
To sum up, based on the aforementioned paragraphs, companies which spend a large amount of money for advertisement, expect that earn more money by selling more. Then, advertisements not only should let companies sell more but also should let them won the game with their rivals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 31, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to be'.
Suggestion: to be
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, so, then, therefore, for example, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1983.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8842364532 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82854723546 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485221674877 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 602.1 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.6993169544 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.4285714286 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7619047619 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179184464216 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0619374363816 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0567014698926 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126052204956 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0902742122671 0.0645574589148 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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