Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that movies are one of the most important entertainments of youths. Some people believe that films have some harmful effects on the behavior of the people whom watch them, especially who are younger and more vulnerable to what they are watching. I, personally, disagree with this opinion and hold the view that movies could be more helpful for the youths' life. In the following paragraphs, I explain my reasons to clarify my viewpoint.
The first reason that coming to my mind is that young people can learn so many new things from the television. There is a lot of training, documents, and educational programs which are playing from the television. One who disagrees with the positive role of television, may just bold the inappropriate programs that show on television and are not related to the youth's age. Therefore, if parents introduce useful channels to their children, and make them familiar with some productive films, they do a big favor not only for their learning process, but also for their future. To clarify, sometimes movies are trying to represent a dilemma in one's life; a difficult situation that might happen for everyone. Then, the movie is going on to present a solution and learn how to deal with the problem. In this way, young people can learn how to interact with their problems in their personal life.
Another reason that coming to my mind is that television can gather families around each other and help the intimate relations between the member of a family. Scientists of the University of Tehran reached to the point that the time the family talks to each other is near 20 minutes per day. Therefore, films could be a good reason that the siblings along with their parents have some fun time. After more, they can share their points of view about the movie after the films are finished. For instance, our family every weekend gather together and we watch out the favorite program on TV. My mother makes a lot of delicious meals and we eat them while watching the program. We have so fun during the TV show and it makes our family relationships stronger.
To sum up, based on the aforementioned paragraphs, movies and televisions not only could bring a lot of new and useful information for young people, but also help them to enjoy from being beside their family. It is crystal clear that the positive effects of television are more than its negative effects if it uses correctly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 372, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'youths'' or 'youth's'?
Suggestion: youths'; youth's
...at movies could be more helpful for the youths life. In the following paragraphs, I ex...
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Line 3, column 643, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...es are trying to represent a dilemma in ones life; a difficult situation that might ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, then, therefore, while, for instance, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2022.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80285035629 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54082836051 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515439429929 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 624.6 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8215146536 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.1 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.05 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.9 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235987187141 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069144432267 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0734313584013 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159702046771 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0671328943523 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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