Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no shadow of a doubt that television advertising is one of the most effective ways to impact on people, especially young children. Some people believe that advertising should not be produced for children and governments must ban these type of advertisements. Others hold an opposite view and declare that advertising is for all people and there should not be any restriction. I, personally, am inclined to the former view and in the following paragraphs will explain my reasons.
To begin with, advertisements are very attractive for children and may they want to see all of them. In this way, kids will waste so much of their time to watching this type of TV program. To be more specific, it will be very harmful for their health situation because not only prevent them from doing physical activities but also hurts their eye vision. Young children at age two to five should spend most of their time playing games with other kids to learn social communication, not just sitting in front of the televisions. To illustrate, research by scientists of the University of Tehran showed that young children who spend more time watching television will face more visual disabilities when they get aged which force them to use glasses. Therefore, it is very harmful to children to spend their time watching advertisements and government should prohibit them from continuing.
Secondly, kids who see the advertisement for a product on TV, to seem appealing, want to have it. Then they will insist on their parents to buy the product which they saw on TV. As is clear, this process will stimulate children which they want all the advertised commodities. Besides, their parents should spend a huge amount of money to make them satisfied by they wanted a thing which may some of whom, in today's economic situation, could not afford it. Majority of the toys or foods which kids persist to have, just come from consuming culture and after a while, they will find which they do not need them.
In conclusion, young children should not be the ambition of the television advertisement. Since they will get hurt by watching TV for the long run, and will be seduced toward the charming shows and want to shop all of them.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1839.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85224274406 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72961489486 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522427440633 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.7085894229 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.176470588 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2941176471 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05882352941 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178371120563 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722284274184 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0578708305083 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125580605862 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496650510166 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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