Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Today's world is so different from the past in many aspects like family relations. Some people believe that the extended family is more important than it was in the past. I, personally, do not agree with this opinion and think that the extended family had a more pivotal role in an individual's life in the past. In the following paragraphs, I explain my reasons to clarify my viewpoint.
To begin with, people are busier nowadays due to their job or academic activities. The majority time of the children spends in the university and school, by doing homework and getting ready for their presentations. In addition, adults are overwhelmed by their office works and daily chores, which will remain no time for visiting grandparents. In the past, one had more time because the level of their activity per day was lower than today. My own experience is a convincing example of this. When I was a kid, every weekend me along with my cousins went to my grandmother's home and met our aunts and uncle. Although, as time passed, all of which found a job or attend university and they do not have much free time. Therefore, today's activities occupied people and minimize their time for visiting their family.
Secondly, in the past, most members of the extended family lived with each other in a big home or the same city. Although, many individuals are migrating nowadays to another city or even country for a better job position or higher level of academic facilities. The distance between the part of a family will reduce the intimate relations among them. For example, one of my uncles, which I saw him each weekend at grandmother's home, migrate with his family abroad last year. This phenomenon affects in a harmful way on our relations and maybe we even cannot see each other anymore. As is clear, separating the member of a family, which shared a home in the past, diminishes the importance of the family, especially the extended family.
In conclusion, the priority of the extended family has been reduced in recent decades. Being engaged with the personal activity which will remain not time to allocate for the family, and live far away from each other which reduce the intimacy of a family, are the reasons for lacking the importance of extended family in today's world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 282, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...ed family had a more pivotal role in an individuals life in the past. In the following para...
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Line 5, column 499, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a harmful way" with adverb for "harmful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...road last year. This phenomenon affects in a harmful way on our relations and maybe we even cann...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1888.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81632653061 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58823870457 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522959183673 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.1726274968 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189653276381 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629169147258 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0571904211326 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133915491476 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0706145715684 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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