Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Job is one of the most important aspects of life. Everyone would face different kinds of job that was offered to him or her. Some people believe that one should accept the first opportunity of a secure job that will be proposed to him. Others believe that people should wait for a more satisfying job. I, personally, agree with the latter opinion and consider satisfaction as the most important part of a job. In the following paragraphs, I explain my reasons to clarify my viewpoint.
The first reason coming to my mind is that if anyone's job does not satisfy him, he cannot have a peaceful life. The job will affect the other parts of daily life and it is not just about the money. People spend roughly one-third of their time in the day at their work. Then, if they work do not satisfy them or cause disturbance for their life, they will be nervous at the other time of the day. This anxiety will be spread to their private life and will affect their relationship with their family. For instance, last year I was working in a company and my boss was a very rude person. He always talked very impolitely to me and this made me nervous and unsatisfied about my job. Hence, when I came back home and I could not speak to my wife properly and tried to compensate for some rude traits on her.
Another reason which deserves being mentioned here is that satisfaction will lead people to work more to have more income. When people are satisfied with their job, they will not be tired after a couple of hours of work. Therefore, they work harder and more than common, and this extra work will cause extra income for them. For example, I am working in a cafe as a waiter and I like my job very much. I stay at the cafe some extra shift during the week and it is not boring for me. As a result, my revenue at the end of the month is higher and I can do some willingness activities like skiing or hiking. Consequently, now I am more satisfied, not only just about my job but also of my life.
To sum up, based on the aforementioned paragraphs, satisfaction is more important than security in choosing a job. Then it is logical that if people have the opportunity to ger a secure job, take it away and wait for a more satisfying job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 31, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to be'.
Suggestion: to be
...er. Another reason which deserves being mentioned here is that satisfaction wil...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, so, then, therefore, third, for example, for instance, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1823.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.37170263789 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42587491086 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467625899281 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 585.9 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 21.3414052152 48.9658058833 44% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.2608695652 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1304347826 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21739130435 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293155871172 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0989546131675 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0824159877256 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229514527978 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.08802443232 0.0645574589148 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.77 10.9000537634 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.91 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.