Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that one of the most important decisions which each people should make to be successful, is choosing the best job. There is a lot of factors which affects the process of job seeking. Some people believe that the ability to relate well to other people is the key factor. Others think that studying hard is more import and determine ones' future job. I, personally inclined to the latter one. In the following paragraphs, I explain my reasons to clarify my viewpoint.
The first reason which comes to my mind is that staying in a job position depends on how one can do the job well. It is possible that someone takes a job position with the association of one his friend or use of his family relations. Although, if he does not have the ability and did not pass the related courses, he could not do his work excellent. In this regard, the head of the company that he is hired will ask him about his faults and the problems that he will have for the company. In this situation, staying on the position and continuing for him on the work will not be guaranteed. On the other hand, have a professional background of colleague or university, which impose students to pass some useful coursed and study hard to learn them great, will warrant the success of people in their jobs.
Another reason that deserves being mentioned here is that finding a job with relation will lead to unsatisfaction for people. Jobs could be very pleasant if workers know about the type of work that they do and see the results of their tries. When people could reach to result than have the ability to solve the upcoming problems, which need the knowledge of the area of working. For instance, my cousin, Ali, had a job in a company. The company manager was his father's friend and company built transportation tools. However, Ali was not a good student at the university and he did not care about his lessons. Ai had a lot of problem with his work and every month he confronts with lots of projects that he could not do them. At last, he came out of his work and he said that he always was nervous at work and the work got her placid form him.
To sum up, based on the aforementioned paragraphs, people who get a job position with the association of their relations, would not reach success in the future. Consequently, not only they cannot do their job well and maybe fired but also will have a stressful life because of responsibilities that they do not have the ability to handle.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 30, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to be'.
Suggestion: to be
...ir jobs. Another reason that deserves being mentioned here is that finding a job wi...
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Line 5, column 617, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun problem seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of problems'.
Suggestion: a lot of problems
... did not care about his lessons. Ai had a lot of problem with his work and every month he confro...
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Line 5, column 779, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'was'.
Suggestion: was always
...ame out of his work and he said that he always was nervous at work and the work got her pl...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, so, well, for instance, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2033.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 451.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50776053215 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51940712363 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490022172949 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4193653378 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4090909091 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63636363636 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236098492148 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0736235809542 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057184510917 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155951724825 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413917472102 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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