Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Travelling has some benefit for both people who travel and the country where people comes to visit. Some people believe that it is better which people visit their own country rather than spending money to travel outside. I, personally, oppose with this idea and think that traveling to a foreign county is superior to own country. In the following paragraphs, I explain my reasons to clarify my viewpoint.
The first reason coming to my mind is that by traveling to a foreign country people can get more familiar with diverse cultures. There are a lot of different traditions and hobbies all around the world which is not identical with what we have. Most of which are related to religious activities that attract so many visitors per year. Individuals who want to be more familiar with various rituals and local ceremonies often travel to the country in which these types of activities are done. On the other hand, people are familiar with the culture of their own country and they have seen the religious ceremonies held in their vicinity. As is clear, being interested in the culture of the other parts of the world give a good reason for the visitor to travel abroad.
Another reason which deserves being mentioned here is that travel to a foreign country where has a distinct language will improve the ability of self-independence in people. When one travel between cities in the country, he is sure that he or she will not get lost because there are a lot of people who can talk to them and ask address or the place of requirements. On the other hand, by traveling to a foreign country, people should rely on themselves to find their destinations which leads them toward independence. For example, when I visited Paris last year, I could not ask any people about the location of malls or museums. Then, I learned how to find them by using some useful application on my cell phone. Therefore, now I know how to deal with similar situations and can find my way by myself without others help.
To sum up, based on the aforementioned paragraphs, travel to a foreign country not only brings people new experiment to get familiar with novel traditions but also help them to find out how to travel lonely when they cannot speak with people around them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 31, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to be'.
Suggestion: to be
...broad. Another reason which deserves being mentioned here is that travel to a fore...
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Line 7, column 165, Rule ID: HELP_TO_FIND[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help them find' instead.
Suggestion: help them find
...familiar with novel traditions but also help them to find out how to travel lonely when they cann...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, then, therefore, for example, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1864.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73096446701 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56362390737 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507614213198 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2594970272 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.647058824 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1764705882 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94117647059 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289506887675 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103033109008 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0744231418531 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201139972068 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0673019899928 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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