Television is a source of entertainment in Today’s world. Some people believe that television has affected our lives immensely and helps in encouraging communication among friends and family. But I believe that Television is one of the major causes that has lead to decreased communication among friends and family. I feel this for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, people are spending more time in their houses rather than going out and enjoying their time with their friends. People are so much obsessed with watching television shows that they avoid going out of their houses. I can give a compelling example to explain this. My cousin loves a cartoon show, Ben 10 and he spends most of his free time watching this show. He loves this show so much that he even watches the repeat telecast of this show. After coming back from his school and finishing his homework, he is usually free for three hours. Instead of playing and communicating with his friends, he sits in front of the Television and watches this show. As a result, he has no friend in his neighborhood.
Moreover, people are wasting their time watching television instead of spending some time with their families. In this competitive world, people usually get a little free time out of their busy schedule and instead of utilizing that time to converse with family, people prefer to watch television. I can give my personal example to support this. My family has a tradition of having dinner together with every family member on the dining table. At the time of having dinner, everyone is usually tired and nobody talks much. Instead of utilising this time to converse with each other, I just switch on the television and then everyone is busy watching the television. Everyone is there on the dining table but nobody is talking to each other. Immediately after finishing dinner, I rush to my room so that I can continue watching my favourite television show privately.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that Television has lead to a decrease in communication among friends and family. I feel this because peolpe spend more time in their houses watching televsion rather than going out and because people prefer watching television over conversing with family.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, moreover, so, then, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1893.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9554973822 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65543756229 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.447643979058 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.8567699019 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.0454545455 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3636363636 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.36363636364 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173456178007 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0745632569992 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118249550323 0.0737576698707 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175718557806 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131398009694 0.0645574589148 204% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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