These days children spend more time on doing homework or participating in school-related activities or sports. However, they should be given more time to do whatever they want.
The past several decades have witnessed the booming quality of education. Under this circumstance, the growing numbers of people trigger a heated debate about whether children should be given more time to do whatever they like in order to cultivate well-rounded students. Some people harbor the opinion that students should have the rights to decide what they should do. Other individuals, however, view this issue from a different angle and conceive that doing homework and taking part in activities benefits students a lot. Taking these two views into consideration, I highly sympathize the latter one and the following paragraphs will testify to the credibility of this argument.
To begin with, from the most convincing reasons from the supporters, one must be stressed is that doing homework is a good way to improve students' study efficiency. As we know, as a student, we should spend approximately ten hours a day at school on taking a variety of classes, such as science course, liberal arts, mathematics, etc. and preparing the different kinds of exams. In this circumstance, it is impossible for students to absorb all knowledge in class due to the tons of new knowledge that need to be acquired. Thus, the best way for us is that only by doing homework can we have a deeper and better understanding of the school work. Just in this way, we could stand a fair chance to get better scores in exams. In the long run, it definitely benefits students' graduation. Consequently, only by doing homework can students have a happy school life and a brighter future.
In addition to the importance of doing homework, I have to notice that it is convincing to lend credence a view that to consider participating the activities in school would be the guarantee for students' mental and physical health because they have a great chance to cultivate some crucial qualities and values through the activities. Besides that, it provides students a previous opportunity to do exercise which can strengthen their physical conditions. Taking playing football, as an example. Students usually form a team to compete with the other team through playing football. Through taking part in the team, they view themselves as team members. What is more, an excellent football team seems like a sophisticated instrument: Midfields are responsible for attacks; Strikers attack and sore goals; Defenders are trying to prevent the opponents to get into the box; Scorekeepers tries to keep the sheet clean. During playing football, students know what the sports spirit is, which is being stronger and being higher. Furthermore, they cultivate the spirit of persistence and endurance due to they need to copy with different kind of difficulties like boring, tiredness and uncomforted. Besides, by playing football, students sweat a lot which is another chance to take a rest and enhance their body conditions.
However, I am not denying the benefits that letting themselves choose whatever they want can boost their happiness. But most of the students are immature, it might be difficult for them to distinguish right from wrong. Under such circumstance, no one can guarantee that they would not be trapped into bad behaviors like violence and drug. In this way, compared with staying in school and finishing their homework and being the part of school activities, it is not wise to allow students to follow their true callings.
To sum up, I highly support the argument that our students should spend a lot of time on school work and motivate ourselves to participate in school activities. Since only by doing this can we have a better body condition and live a happy life, which will lead a brighter future than before.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, so, then, thus, well, in addition, kind of, such as, to begin with, to sum up, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 87.0 52.1666666667 167% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3100.0 1977.66487455 157% => OK
No of words: 611.0 407.700716846 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0736497545 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.97176167858 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81328589645 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 297.0 212.727598566 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486088379705 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 926.1 618.680645161 150% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.2192777233 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.714285714 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8214285714 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.17857142857 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293411441748 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0701785388874 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0696869535439 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170386030342 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0608848472535 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 86.8835125448 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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