As travel becomes increasingly accessible, more and more people take long vacations every year. I am of the belief that visiting a museum is the best way to get to know a new destination. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, modern museums are very exciting and accessible, which means they are a great way to acquire new knowledge. These days, museums are designed to be inviting to the general public. In the past, they often contained stuffy and uninteresting exhibitions of boring artifacts, but modern museums contain interactive and stimulating hands-on displays. My own experience while traveling last month in Canada is a compelling example of this. While visiting the city of Winnipeg last year, I spent an afternoon in Canada’s National Human Rights Museum. This state-of-the-art facility contains touch-screen displays, and a plethora of sensor-activated exhibits all of which delighted me. I even attended a presentation given by an expert historian that I had read about on the museum’s website the day before. My visit taught me an enormous amount about the history of Canada. I feel that there are many similarly interactive museums all over the world nowadays.
Secondly, museums are not focused on making a profit, so they provide an unbiased perspective. These days there are a lot of guided tours available to tourists, but since the operators want to keep their customers happy they might ignore some of the negative aspects of a city or country. While it is relaxing to be guided by someone else, a tour won’t teach us as much as a visit to a local museum. Ten years ago, I was fortunate enough to visit the Central European country of Sokovia. The person who guided my tour of the capital city there was a gregarious person and entertained me and my family with a lot of hilarious jokes, but I felt that his tour was a little superficial. When we visited the State Museum a few days later, we were able to see an exhibit about Sokovia’s civil war of the early twentieth century, which highlighted some of the negative actions take by the country’s government. Had I not visited the museum, I wouldn’t have learned anything about that period of time.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that people should visit museums when they take a holiday. This is because museums are increasingly being designed with mass appeal in mind, and because they can provide a very complete picture of a country’s history.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, secondly, similarly, so, while, as for, i feel, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2103.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97163120567 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98484679621 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562647754137 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 675.9 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3386780063 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.142857143 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1428571429 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42857142857 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151833858522 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0502361513131 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0491845094681 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0949588326903 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0269168144248 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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