These days, people enjoy a lot of time away from their work and school obligations. Many people use this time to visit new places and learn about them. What do you think is the best way to learn about a place you are visiting for the first time?
• Going to a museum
• Joining a guided tour of popular attractions
• Visiting a popular shopping area
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
These days more and more people addicted to travel around the world for many reasons. In my opinion, visiting a museum of the new place would be far beneficial to learn from that place compared to other choices, If I forced to choose. I feel this for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essays.
To begin with, the museum is the best place to know about those countries’ cultures and histories from just one place. As a matter of fact that the great archives give you tremendous knowledge and deep understanding of exotic cultures. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my experience. Last year, I decided to travel to Russia but I haven’t any preservation about this country so I visited the museum of Russian ambassador in Mongolia. When I visited in this place, at first time I completely surprised how it was beautiful and knowledgeable, most importantly, I wanted to respect unconsciously their experiences of the World War 2 which was the best brutal and violent war in the world I have ever expected it. This notion gives me perfect realisation about this country’s huge histories and basic cultures which helped me to communicate with them more appropriately and morality.
Secondly, acquiring deep knowledge from the museum gives you opportunity to distinguish cultures discrepancies between your host country and that country. Drawing from my own another experience, When I visited the museum of Turkey which I planned to travel that time, I greatly noticed how were those countries different from each other such as history, technological advancement and so on. Interesting to note that the most distinguishable thing between those countries is the religions which are Muslim and Buddha. Then I deeply understand that Muslim religion’s some rules which are very strict even if I was a foreigner. This example demonstrates how important to visit museums of the country or place you want to go. Needless to say, without this notion, I would completely fail to create unforgettable memories of this travel.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that if you want to know about country or place which attracted you the most, you have to visit their museum at first. This is because it gives you a realisation about that country’s cultures and histories and because it clarifies what difference between your country and that place which is essential part of successful travel.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a matter of fact, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2065.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08620689655 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02257696529 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519704433498 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3804002236 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.470588235 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8823529412 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35294117647 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283705049308 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0914443025784 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0667797789464 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188389474642 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357893040769 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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