3. In general, people are living longer now. Which of the following do you think is the main cause of this phenomenon?
• Technological improvements
• Changes to education systems
• improvements to our diets
These days most of the people live longer than ever before compared to the previous centuries because of many aspects. In my opinion, This an increase in average life span is caused by technological advancement. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, Thanks to the modern scientific growth people tend to live more healthy because of highly educated doctors and many useful healthcare devices such as X-ray and ultrasound therapy for Alzheimer's disease. These instruments are beneficial to identify what disorders and diseases suffer patients and how they resolve those problems effectively and immediately so in recent years the number of dead people has decreased rapidly. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my grandfather’s experience. Three years ago, His health had degraded year by year and we didn’t know why he suffered a lot. Then we decided to meet a doctor and he diagnosed that having terminal cancer. We went to all reliable hospitals to ask to help him but no one gave a hand us because of my country’s poor condition of the economy couldn’t afford to purchase expensive tools to treat his ailment. We didn’t want to give up immediately and went to Korea which was our last hope. Fortunately, thanks to great technology my grandfather were saved.
Secondly, Those improvements help to future doctors to acquire great knowledge and invaluable experience from laboratory works and real practice skill. In the past, doctors hadn’t any sufficient material to study hard and work in the laboratory, even more, it was limited to invent and study their new creative ideas which may help to treat and resist against some diseases for public well-being. Drawing from my mother’s experience, she is a great epidemiologist and one time she said that it was so difficult to undergo earlier years to become a good doctor or invent any new vaccination because of inadequate materials and poor economy of my country. However, Now we have plenty of opportunities to become a good doctor and aid others more. This example demonstrates how technological progression help individuals to live longer now.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that people have prolonged longevity due to high-tech improvement in today world. This is because it creates many chances to produce any sophisticated tools to heal people and because it emerges many opportunities to become a dexterous doctor to our young generations.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, i feel, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2140.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19417475728 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04020720281 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.599514563107 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.5171795561 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.888888889 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8888888889 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154261934956 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0529760393935 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477768045441 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108043289921 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428461535766 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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