The administrators of a university are revising their budget and have decided to change their funding priorities. As a result, the university will now spend more money on sports and athletic facilities than they do on the campus libraries. Do you think this is a good idea? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.
it is difficult for the university’">university’s officials to decide how to spend their budget effectively. Personally, I firmly believe that it is better to encourage libraries rather than sport and art departments. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, most of the students spend their university’">university’s lives in the libraries because it is more convenient and quieter than any other place. Since their dormitories have full of events and activities, there is no place to fully focus on their assignments and theses but only in the libraries. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my country’s experience. when I was in university, there were always noise around the faculties and main halls. also, I was very sensitive with loud noises and couldn’t concentrate on my assignments; however, I found the fine library in my campus which was the only place I could stay for 24 hours every day. Thanks to the supportive administrators, my university's main library was repaired and received a lot of books from different fields. I couldn’t fulfil my goal to succeed in my academics from a variety of fields without the help of this beautiful library. Needless to say, I still love spending my weekends in the library near my home because I truly know how much it is helpful to acquire in-depth knowledge.
Secondly, A library is always the best place to read free great books collection as much as you want. In my country, there are a lot of students who can’t afford to pay the book costs but they have libraries. Drawing from my brother’s experience, when he was in university, he read almost two hundred books from every subject in its library because not only he was an enthusiast of books but also he never had an opportunity to experience such a great amount of book to read. In addition to this, he always told me about how great resources there were in which couldn’t find anywhere such as historical documents of our local state and great authors’ original masterpieces. Due to this exceptional library, he successfully granted his degree as a journalist and gave him the chance to teach literature for poor children.
In conclusion, I truly believe that the university’">university’s officials need to spend more money to provide the investment of on-campus libraries than arts and sports this is because it is very beneficial to students to attain in their academics and because it provides the opportunity to read a lot of books without any payment.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, thus, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2226.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11724137931 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 4.24846245299 2.67179642975 159% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524137931034 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 695.7 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.4476917448 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.941176471 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5882352941 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88235294118 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149764330034 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561188552409 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659645739591 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121994834742 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0621118477937 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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