People have a lot of opinions about the value of advanced education. Which do you think is the most important reason to attend college or university? Use reasons and examples to support your answer.
• new experiences
• career preparation
• increased knowledge
These days a lot of people receive great knowledge from decent universities and colleges because of their own reasons. In my opinion, If I forced to choose those different plausible choices, I would definitely choose the third one because of my own preference. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay,
To begin with, Having a great education is the foundation of both well-paid job and high status so I assume that it is the best way to prepare your future career efficiently. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my father’s experience. From his young age memory, He was born in a poor family so he always tried hard to absorb knowledge from his school as much as possible because he knew it was the basis of high-quality life in coming high-tech world. Then after he graduated from his university, He easily promoted as an accounting of the business company. Twenty years later thanks to both each day of making a progress and unfathomable desire to know everything he became CEO of his own company. This example demonstrates how education affects to individual’s success both diffusively and straight ways.
Secondly, Provided for own career through using the importance of high education allows to people satisfied with their life more fully also can improve their hidden talents, hobbies to learn from their co-workers who also well-educated and intelligent people. Drawing from my own experience, I really appreciate the education lot because my family truly know this amazing treasure’s magic. One year ago, I graduated from my university and then I was offered by a foreign company to work with them abroad. The first time, I really shocked and I felt the meaning of true education from my bottom of the heart because they mentioned in their email about my academic excellence were attracted them a lot. Being in a foreign country and working with the smartest and most talented people from all over the world is true happiness from me and it gives me a chance to learn closely from my colleagues day by day.
I strongly believe that earning invaluable education is essential to career preparation a lot. This is because it gives you the opportunity to be valued your own diligence by high prestigious companies for receiving well-paid wage and because it helps you to become more adept and a crucial person in your community.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'peopling'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: peopling
...the importance of high education allows to people satisfied with their life more fully al...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, then, third, well, i feel, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2061.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00242718447 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85342246213 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558252427184 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.4111902056 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.4 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4666666667 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119192793135 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0446685770549 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0325623310224 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0817027758639 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0255392734854 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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