Imagine that you are preparing for a trip. You plan to be away from your home for a year. In addition to clothing and personal care items, you can take one additional thing. What would you take and why? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.
It is critically important to prepare well for your journey because it gives you a lot of convenience and confidence with your travel. If I had a chance to take one extra accessory with me during my absent one year, I would personally prefer to take my cell phone with me. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, sometimes people easily bored with their long-lasting travel but they can use their smartphone to entertain themselves. This is mainly due to the fact that the recent smartphones are designed as integrated devices such as combined with some music and enjoyable applications, even more, it can access to Internet readily. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own experience. Last year, I went to Canada because I had to attend the competition of young scholars program and I honestly felt bored on account of the fact that I had to fly over 20 hours to reach there. However, thanks to technological advancement I watched movies and listened to music which my favourite ones and in the rest of the time of the tour I didn’t even feel any irritation and tired some. Without my smartphone, the trip would completely terrible one.
Secondly, Bringing my cell phone during my travel is tremendously beneficial to communicate with my loved ones even I am far away from them. Drawing for my own experience, I have studied in Korea for my bachelor degree and sometimes I feel being home-sick and miss my family and friends a lot more than you expected it. Besides, using my cell phone I haven’t felt isolated from my beloved ones also I can easily access the internet connection which helps me carry out some actions in my country. What’s more, I capture my travelling photos and post them in online platforms simply thanks to my phone. This example demonstrates how it is crucial to bring your cell phone with you during the trip.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that If I had an opportunity to take one component thing from my trip beyond attire and personal care items, I would honestly prefer to bring my phone. This is because it relaxes me a lot when I am annoyed and exhausted with my long trip and because it helps to connect my family and friends whenever and wherever I want.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, honestly, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, i feel, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1916.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69607843137 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72091501305 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531862745098 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 614.7 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.7248141791 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.75 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174404463483 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681452081367 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644519119111 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127429836612 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0672106889845 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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