Many people visit museums when they travel to new places. Why do you think people visit museums? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Travelling around the world is not as easy as we think about it now because it sometimes hard to understand some countries’ cultures and traditions. However, I firmly believe that touring their museums is the best idea to understand their life with more ease. I feel this way for these main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, the museums contain a lot of critical things of their countries such as crucial events and discoveries and so on, thus it is the best place to travel the country’s history for a while. Then you will easily understand what they have gone through over time and even you can realise their values and beliefs from these places. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by own experience. Before I decided to travel to Russia, I had visited their museum which had plenty of historical discoveries. While I watching these incredible findings, the guide was explaining everything with details. After I went to my home, I could not stand to admire and think about it, thus I decided to save money to travel to this country. As a result, thanks to their museum in my neighbourhood, I easily interact with local people and even truly respect their rituals and cultures. It goes without saying that if I had not visited the Russian museum, I would have never understood their lives and beliefs.
On top of this, visiting museums will allow you to decide whether it is a good idea to travel to this country if you have not firmly decided it yet. This is mainly due to the fact that, while you visiting museums, you interact directly with their life and even deeply know their cultural differences. Drawing from my experience, I really like visiting another country and learn from them. However, it is sometimes hard to decide where I will go next, so I would like to visit their museums and also it helps me to avoid some mistakes. For instance, I am quite interested in travelling to some Muslim countries; however, after I visited their museums, I a little concern about our difference in religion. This is because they really respect their religion and it may hard to align with their cultures. Therefore, I decided to travel to another country because I am a little frightened of their strict religious rules.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that it is essential to visit their museums before visit foreign countries. This is because it will help to perceive their local people’s daily lives and their beliefs and this is because it aids you to avoid some mistakes that may cause a serious problem after you arrive in that country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, really, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 90.0 43.0788530466 209% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2194.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75921908894 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62152867782 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470715835141 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.0 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.3060256707 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.7 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.05 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194743907662 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696542163992 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497523198771 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134380453188 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445261333623 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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