Many people visit museums when they travel to new places. Why do you think people visit museums? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Many people visit museums when they travel to new places. Why do you think people visit museums? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some historians have a words “ancient countries have something strange” it means ancient countries like, India and china have nice museums that they exhibit the ancient tools that describe different cultures like, clothes, fighting tools –sword, spire, shield and armors-. Beside, that people try to enjoy, or they use their time. Moreover, they try to know the history of that country. So, I believe that it is really good when people visit any country and they try to visit museums. In fact, it is a way to know about people. So, I love to visit the museums when I travel somewhere and I believe that more than 90% of people like to have the same experience. On the other hand, I advise all people try to visit museums.
First, in India or in China, they have some museums and they exhibit ancient or very old things like, swords, spires, shields and clothes that belong to the kings. However, I was in China and I visit some museums they were fascinating and the most amusing one was China museum that belong to Tong family on that place they exhibit some tools that belong to Tong family they were clever and use steal to made strong fighting tools like, swords, spire and shield that were unbreakable. So, it was like a miracle on that time and I understand that they had the base of knowledge and I like China people. Due to, they have had different knowledge.
Second, when people visit ancient countries like India or China it is nice idea and joyful if they visit some museums. On the other hand, they can see something new. For instance, I was in India my friend Jay, he is an Indian, said to me lets go to visit a museum that is next to his home and I said ok lest s do it. However, when I went to museum I saw something from 2000BC. So, it was fascinating near 3 hours we were on museum and it passed like 3 minutes I saw the crown of the Moghuls kings the crown has a large number of diamonds. So, they were rich and I thought they like jewelries.
Last but least, when people visit museums they can know history of that country and we can know the culture of people that they live there. However. I am in capital of Iraq (Baghdad) and every Saturday I visit one museum it is really amusing. So, Iraq is an ancient country and they had a large number of schools that belong to the 800 years ago some famous persons like Avicenna, father of medical and philosopher science, Jalal Adin Mohammad Balkh they were students on that schools. However, it is nice idea that people visit museums they can know that people and understand about them. So, I like to visit museums.
To sum up, when people go to travel anywhere it is nice idea to visit some museums. In fact, this visit help them to know people of that country help them to understand their cultures like, how they clothing and what they use in the past specially during the fighting on past time. On the other hand, it help them enjoy their trip. So, I advise all people when they visit a country. They prepare a timetable and visit museum specially while they travel to ancient countries like India or China. I visited and it was fascinating. So, I advised other people to visit museums they can learn more about that countries.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, really, second, so, while, for instance, in fact, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 13.8261648746 217% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 29.0 11.0286738351 263% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 96.0 43.0788530466 223% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2625.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 588.0 407.700716846 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.46428571429 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9242980521 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.25702442662 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.365646258503 0.524837075471 70% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 813.6 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 25.0 9.59856630824 260% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.5314730354 48.9658058833 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.5172413793 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.275862069 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.89655172414 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336536138428 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128048420357 0.076458572812 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0836833033414 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243314842694 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0657311043164 0.0645574589148 102% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.27 8.01818996416 78% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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