It is better for children to grow up in countryside than in big city. Do you agree or dis agree?
Some sociologists believe that when children grow up in crowd places they are more intelligence than children that they are grow up in isolate. On the other hand, they believe children in crowd place can recognize the challenge and find the solution. So, I believe that it is better for children to grow up in big city and I have some reasons. Therefore, big cities have modern school, people in big cities access technology and another important reason when children grow up in big cities they well have better future. However, I love this statement that “it is better for children to grow up in big city” and I don’t love to children grow up in countryside.
First, modern schools are in big city when children grow up in big city they can learn different subjects and languages. For instance, in Herat city we have modern schools, but we have not these kinds of schools in countryside. So, they teach four languages for their students and provide them different scholarships. For talent students they have different programs and push them to the best universities in Europe or United States. So, I believe that it is better for children to grow up in big city.
Second, people in big city they have access different technologies for learning, studying and grow up. So, I love that it is better for children to grow up in big city. For example, my nephew he is eight years old and he studies in Kabul city in Habibie School. So, he knows how to programming a computer and how to make an application for his cell phone I believe it miracle. On the other hand, my niece she leaves and studies in countryside school or in our village she don’t know how to work with computer programs like word, excel, and PowerPoint. However, I prefer that it is better for children to grow up in big city.
Third, when children grow up or leave they can have a brighter future, because they can learn or studying better with better tools. In fact, practically and theory. For instance, children in big city when they learning something about the astronomy at the first they start theory of that and after that they explain by practically. Show stars milky ways by telescope. So, they never forget their studies. However, I believe that it is better for children to grow up in big city or I love this idea children grow up in big city.
To summarize, both grow up in big city and grow up in countryside have some advantages and disadvantages. However, I believe that it is better for children to grow up in big city. So, big city has some advantages like, modern schools for children and I believe it is very important for all families, in the big city people have access different technologies, and they have brighter future when they grow up in big city. However, I prefer that it is better for children to grow up in big city and I love that children grow up in big city.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, third, well, for example, for instance, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2369.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 515.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57599290886 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.341747572816 0.524837075471 65% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 735.3 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0492628645 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.1153846154 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8076923077 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38461538462 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.369240989556 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.178211240081 0.076458572812 233% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.155318530091 0.0737576698707 211% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.284163584269 0.150856017488 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.062875537419 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.69 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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