Imagine that you are preparing for a trip. You plan to be away from your home for a year. In addition to clothing and personal care items, you can take one additional thing. What would you take and why? Use specific reasons and details to support your cho

If I am about to go out for trip which lasts for a year, besides the essential items I shoul take, a notebooe for diary is necessary for me. I have the habbit of writing diaries, hence a long time leaving home, the diary would keep everything I want to record during the trip. This notebook is important for me, I will address my views as follows.

To begin with, the notebook I use to keep diary helped me when I was studying hard in high school. I remembered the tough days before the college entrance exmination. My grade at school was not high enough to promise me to the dream univesity, so I had to work harder and harder. As there are sometimes I would not like to talk to my parents with my study, I wrote the feelings in my daries, after a while when I finished the diary I felt a little bit relaxed. Though I still suffered from my nervous mind, I really enjoyed the time when I wrote something on the notes. Also, my hard-working days were written in my previous daries, until now I still would like to take it out to read the words and experince the feeling of that time.

What's more, the notebook could record interest things during the trip. Once I missed the plane then I had stayed at the airport for a whole night, waiting for another flight took me home. I was so annoyed that I wrote this in the diary. Years later when I read my diary again, I found it was interesting to epxrince missing a flight. I had to walk around amolst the whole airport to play the time for waiting. I even made friends who also missed the same flight with me.

In addtion, a notebook for daries would be my usefull asistant during the trip. As the trip lasts for a year, so I should have an general plan.While a notebook for me would let me make the trip to be in specific. Firstly I can arrange the proper time at proper place. When to arrive, when to leave and how to do when some emergent things happen. Secondly, some important informations could be recorded in the note as the number of the Chinese ambassies of the countries I would go to. Thirdly and I like it most is that I can have some interesting seals or badges on the paper of the notebook as a special suvenior.

In all, a trip for a year is fantastic to me, I would like to take a notebook to try my best to write evetything down during the trip.

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Average: 4 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, hence, if, really, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, while, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1877.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.22747747748 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34651719945 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486486486486 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 597.6 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.2565753512 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.3181818182 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1818181818 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15434726804 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0492165146124 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0509986353186 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109601191143 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0467905778179 0.0645574589148 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 58.1214874552 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.25 10.9000537634 67% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.94 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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