Imagine that you are preparing for a trip. You plan to be away from your home for a year. In addition to clothing and personal care items, you can take one additional thing. What would you take and why? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.
SINCE THE INVENTION OF INTERNET, computers PLAYED TREMENDOUS ROLE IN EACH THE live OF INDIVIDUALS. NOWADAYS, MANY are ADAMANT THA A MYRIAD OF ELEMENTS should BE TAKEN into CONSIDERATION IN ORDER TO EXAMINATE ITS CONSTRUCTIVE AND DESTRUCTIVE FACETS OF this issue. SOME people MAY HOLD THE view that they are one OF most important item IN our life BECAUSE OF ITS BENEFITS. HOWEVER, others TAKE A OPPOSITE SITE AND CONSIDER there are another important items IN our life. FROM my VANTAGE point, I CONCUR WITH THE FORMER GROUP AND THE LINES BELOW WILL SHED ON LIGHT my view point.
THE FIRST REASON TO mention TO SAY is that they CONNECT people. AFTER THE INVENTION facebook, people, EVEN OLDER ones who DO NOT KNOW TO use computer, START TO use it. it help TO people TO SPEAK OR see EACH other WITH VIDEO APPLICATION. they LEARN WHERE is THEIR RELATIVES AND see THEIR PHOTOS. A VIVID EXAMPLE which can BE GIVEN into THE SUBJECT is one OF my OWN EXPERIENCE. I used TO Facebook TO communicate WITH my FAMILY WHEN I was IN GERMANY AS A STUDENT. using CELL PHONE was MUCH MORE expensive. AS A RESULT, my computer was NOT ONLY help TO communicate BUT ALSO CUT my expenses.
SECONDLY, IN APPROACHING this issue APART FROM WHAT mention ABOVE, there is another SUBTLE point which MUST BORNE IN MIND. DUE TO INCREASINGLY CHANGING TECHNOLOGIES, TODAY’S company PREFER TO HIRE PERSON who are KEEP up WITH computer CODING AND MODELLING. it help THE YOUGHT TO FIND A DECEND JOB without STEPPING OUT living ROOM.A NOTEWORTHY REFRESHINGLY INTTELIGIBLE STATISTICS REVEALED BY A RECENT RESEARCH which CONDUCTED AT MIT UNIVERSITY IN THE USA SHOWED that BIG companies TEND TO RECRUIT YOUNG people who HAVE HIGH computer SKILLS.
TO WRAP it up, ONCE can CONCLUDE that computers are one OF most SIGNIFICANT THING IN our life. I can NOT IMAGINE A life without them. people should GIVE ENOUGH INTEREST them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...OW WILL SHED ON LIGHT my view point. THE FIRST REASON TO mention TO SAY is th...
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...OW TO use computer, START TO use it. it help TO people TO SPEAK OR see EACH other WI...
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... see EACH other WITH VIDEO APPLICATION. they LEARN WHERE is THEIR RELATIVES AND see ...
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...ILY WHEN I was IN GERMANY AS A STUDENT. using CELL PHONE was MUCH MORE expensive. AS ...
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...ommunicate BUT ALSO CUT my expenses. SECONDLY, IN APPROACHING this issue APAR...
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Message: Did you mean 'have BORNE' or 'bear'?
Suggestion: Have BORNE; Bear
...here is another SUBTLE point which MUST BORNE IN MIND. DUE TO INCREASINGLY CHANGING T...
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...AY'S company PREFER TO HIRE PERSON who are KEEP up WITH computer CODING AND MODELL...
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... up WITH computer CODING AND MODELLING. it help THE YOUGHT TO FIND A DECEND JOB wi...
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... WITH computer CODING AND MODELLING. it help THE YOUGHT TO FIND A DECEND JOB without...
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...ND JOB without STEPPING OUT living ROOM.A NOTEWORTHY REFRESHINGLY INTTELIGIBLE ST...
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... I can NOT IMAGINE A life without them. people should GIVE ENOUGH INTEREST them. ...
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...le should GIVE ENOUGH INTEREST them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, apart from, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1589.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87423312883 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66691463367 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.634969325153 0.524837075471 121% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.0554245166 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.6315789474 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1578947368 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26315789474 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0762593787094 0.236089414692 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0243841452304 0.076458572812 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0228564387503 0.0737576698707 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0465043133144 0.150856017488 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0170626812169 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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