In general, people are living longer now. Which of the following do you think is the main cause of this phenomenon?
• Technological improvements
• Changes to education systems
• Improvements to our diets
As the time have progressed, so have humans and their lifespan too. Today, the life expectancy have increased so much that it cannot be imagined previously. I believe this increase is possible due to technological improvements and will explore the reasons in the subsequent paragraphs.
Firstly, technological advancements have made groundbreaking discoveries in the field of medicine easier. Consequently, more solutions are available to counter various diseases which were the reason of death in the previous time. Nowadays, diagnosis of every disease have become possible, which is a major factor for increase in life expectancy. my personal experience is a compelling example of this. To recall, when I was a kid I suffered with jaundice. Fortunately, the modern medicine was able to cure me within a week and don't have to go through a recovery process which this malady required. Moreover, I also escaped all the restrictions on my diet plan in order to cure jaundice. Therefore, improvements in medicine field have helped me a fast recovery without suffering consequences.
Secondly, evolution of technology has provided us with modern devices which can monitor our internal functioning. For example, X-ray can detect which the portion of the bone is cracked, MRI can display the working of brain etc. this has made better examination of human body possible and giving customised treatment. For instance, recently, my uncle was going through severe headache. It's been weeks he had been taking medicine but all were futile. One of the doctor advised him to go for MRI. The results were shocking, there was a tumour in his brain, which is causing the pain. As a result, he was operated immediately and got relief from pain. Hence, if there were no modern machines, my uncle would have been only be given painkillers without knowing the actual case.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that life expectancy have improved because of technological improvements. This is because new medicines were discovered to treat the diseases and because the machines developed for better assessment of human body.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1782.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25663716814 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98331171651 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59587020649 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.4313004095 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.0 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4090909091 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72727272727 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119086734308 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0351036270116 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.037673112423 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0753018032923 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.010558812104 0.0645574589148 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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