Three kinds of activities have been offered for a special day that is going to beorganized by the International Student office. Which one do you prefer? (1) International food fair (2) International music festival (3) International film festival.
universities have become such a place where students from different nationalities could be found. It is undeniable that International Student offices are seeking a way to build strong relationships among international students. Each person thinks uniquely however in my point of view, I strongly support the idea of holding an international music festival for the most two obvious reasons which have been noted in the subsequent paragraphs.
The first remarkable point to defend my standpoint is that music is a language everyone from anywhere can easily understand and is such an effective way to make communication possible among international students with sharply different backgrounds. Actually, music brings international students together by providing such a positive friendly atmosphere among them, which leads to building relationships or making friends. Taking my friend as an apt illustration for this, he is a musician despite he knows no language but Kurdish takes part in the international music festival every year. Thereby, he has many friends from different nationalities that their only bridge of communication is music. As a result, international music festival makes friendship more possible since music is a language that social members with any nationality can communicate with.
The second significant reason to advocate my outlook is that music is an efficient way to express and explain our culture. As a matter of fact, music is the most common feature of culture in distinct nations so it could be the best way for attracting every single international student in holding the festival or supporting that. My Experience is a great example to clarify this. Two years ago when I was still a student, the international student office held a music festival at the university for international students to perform their own traditional music. Different teams from different nations performed for three straight days, which was a dramatically exciting festival I never have seen before. As a consequence, I familiarized myself with various music styles and musical instruments and how diverse music is. Had the international student office never held that music festival, I could not have known regarding the various styles of music of other nations.
To wrap up what has been mentioned above, it is my firm opinion that an international music festival is the best option for the international student office to hold on. Music can be understood by anyone from every nation in addition to that music is the most common feature among various nations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Universities
universities have become such a place where students...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, look, regarding, second, so, still, in addition, as a matter of fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2168.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33990147783 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0907355543 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514778325123 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4257415769 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.529411765 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8823529412 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.82352941176 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338823475165 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131425850106 0.076458572812 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0920973475819 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252330941593 0.150856017488 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287485386318 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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