Do you agree or disagree that it is important for young people to learn some domestic skills or not?
While housework has been a necessity of human life during history, Opinions are divided whether learning them is necessary any more or not. It is my confirm conviction that learning chores would be helpful that in what follows, I will pinpoint two most obvious reasons to elaborate on my standpoint.
The first reason to support this viewpoint is that learning housework makes young people more confidant especially those who are living away from their home and parents. it is undeniable that chores are a big part of our private life that being able to do them gives us more confidence to take opportunities to make our independent life. My own experience is a compelling demonstration of this. When I went to university I had to rent an apartment to live in, with two of my friends who were too worried regarding housework such as cooking, shopping, cleaning and etc. that they had to leave the university. however, thanks to my experiences of helping my parents with chores I was all sure to handle them. had I never learned housework, I would have faced serious Problems like my friends. Therefore, learning domestic skills help us to be more able to live on our own.
The second reason to champion this outlook is that learning domestic abilities like cooking could help us to live healthily and stay fit. it is clear that homemade foods are far healthier than once served at fast-foods where have become the most popular places to eat among youngsters. So, if you be able to cook on your own, you will not have to consume such greasy and sugary foods which are extremely harmful to our health as our most worthless property. as an example to clarify this, since my friend could not make meals he had to go out to have his meals and fast food was his favorite option. After a while, he faced obesity and blood high cholesterol that he had to take pills which his life depended on them. if he had learned how to make a few easy meals, he could have not faced health issues. As a result, learning some chores like cooking can keep us to stay healthy.
from what has been discussed, I strongly believe that domestic skills are crucial for young people. learning housework is helpful because not only does it give enough confidence to young individuals to live away from home, but also keeps young social members healthy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, regarding, second, so, therefore, while, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1918.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67804878049 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51056068072 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553658536585 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.009891989 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.947368421 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5789473684 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15789473684 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15900241154 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0508571153481 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558153991766 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104188583644 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0553409942627 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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