Today, famous people like movie stars and professional athletes have a lot of influence, and sometimes they express their political views publicly, such as on TV or through social media. Do you think that it is good for people to be exposed to their opinions, or do you think that it is not good for people to be exposed to their opinions?
Some people believe that famous, influential celebrities should not expose their opinions to the public. Perhaps they cite the point because of their messages’ huge prowess and the repercussions which can be caused by expressing their thoughts. However, in my opinion, I disagree to these people and maintain that public can be exposed to influential star’s personal ideas. I will support my viewpoint with the following two reasons.
First of all, we can learn about our favored star’s different kinds of beliefs and their personal ideas. There can be numerous controversial topics these days which needs to be debated between public. For example, a celebrity might have interest and ideas on general topics like whether drugs should be allowed or not. On top of that, they might have different ideas about issues like ongoing war between the two nations of Ukraine and Russia. Even though one person can view such topic in a different side and might disagree to the famous person, it can be informative and learning to know about how celebrities think about certain subjects. Thus, to absorb and listen to many different ideas, especially of these influential ones, being exposed to their ideas can be beneficial.
Second of all, influential people can advertise a benign message to more people. Indeed, every people can write their thoughts and make it spread all over the globe these days. However, it can be much powerful being sent by influencers. For example, the famous actor, Leonardo DiCaprio, voices out the critical warnings of the climate change very often. In movie awards ceremony, he gave a speech about the global warming and its severeness. This can affect millions of viewers immediately and is more effective than spending expensive budget to propagate the same message to any other medium. To clarify, I view the acts of celebrities speaking good messages to their many followers and fans beneficial to our society.
To conclude, whether being exposed to the messages of famous people is good or not can be a complex issue. To some, it might pose worries regarding the celebrities’ huge influential power. However, I still contend that being exposed to personal thoughts of eminent people can be beneficial because it can be conducive to learning for myself and can help sending valuable messages to the world as well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 674, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...subjects. Thus, to absorb and listen to many different ideas, especially of these influential ...
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Line 4, column 108, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... is good or not can be a complex issue. To some, it might pose worries regarding t...
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Line 4, column 355, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to send' or 'send'.
Suggestion: to send; send
...ive to learning for myself and can help sending valuable messages to the world as well....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, regarding, second, so, still, thus, well, for example, first of all, in my opinion, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1968.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11168831169 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62941313971 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54025974026 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4198841747 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.4 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254578249374 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0880071237065 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653439031382 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178789942432 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055776299101 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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