These days, young people are less reliant on their parents’ advice to make important life decisions.
Some people argue that child’s must follow their parents’ advice in making important life decisions. They cite that parent have much more life experience as well as heavy knowledge regarding those experiences as well. However, in my opinion, I strongly disagree to these people and believe that there are many alternatives other than parents’ advice on making life choices. I will support my viewpoint with the following two reasons.
First of all, advance of technology has brought us accessibility to contact any other people from different places all over the world. Development of the Internet and communications using it, such as emails enable us to contact other people and ask advice for them. For example, if one wants to become an actor, one can ask specific questions related to acting to best performers in the world. In the past, asking questions to other people were difficult especially if you didn’t know the person privately. In other words, compared to suffering from limitations on finding advisors who can help you make life decisions in the past, one can conveniently easily ask for advice online these days.
Second of all, our evolving society changes precipitously which makes relying solely on our parents’ advice vulnerable. Modern society goes through very fast and broad changes in many aspects of lives. For example, there are new jobs and fields which are introduced where those have not existed in the past, especially during our parent’s generation. Our parent’s valued professional jobs, such as doctors or lawyers. Although this belief might be somewhat true in their children’s generations, but there are new propitious jobs like YouTube creators or personal trainers where such occupations are newly created. To make up with the quickly changing world, there is necessity to ask for advice to other generations’ experts as well.
To conclude, whether deciding how much the appropriate scale of relying on parents’ advice to make important decisions for the young is complex. Some suggest that young people should rely the most to their parents for important choices. However, I still contend that young people should rely less on their parents and ask for other people’s advice as well in making important life choices.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 362, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'to the best'.
Suggestion: to the best
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, regarding, second, so, still, well, for example, such as, as well as, first of all, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1918.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26923076923 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7122773635 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552197802198 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9907395497 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.555555556 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2222222222 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.381484090272 0.236089414692 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125645792701 0.076458572812 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129356980027 0.0737576698707 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249925165279 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.143047838785 0.0645574589148 222% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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