It is sometimes acceptable to infringe upon people’s freedom
Most people admit the importance of freedom and prioritize its value. To some, they argue that freedom should be protected in any circumstances because it is fundamental and essential. However, in my opinion, I disagree with these people and believe that freedom can be curbed in some particular cases. I will support my viewpoint with the following two reasons.
First of all, one’s freedom can endanger other people at risk in some cases. As freedom is important to one, it is as important to others as well. I think one’s freedom should not be pursued when it damages crucial things such as others' safety or life. For example, during the Covid-19 pandemic, we experienced many contaminated people infecting others whether they did it intentionally or accidently. This problem becomes severe when they behave irresponsibly while utilizing their freedom. While the disease control rigorously tried to stop the virus from spreading by segregating infected people, some did not follow the rules and let the virus spread out. Thus, to protect the safety of the general people, individuals’ freedom must be limited in some situations.
Second of all, there are other things to be valued as much as freedom depending on the nation’s particular status. We live in diverse places where each place has different conditions to abide by. For example, in South Korea, every citizen who is a male has to finish their mandatory military service. This is because the country is in the respite of the Korean war between North Korea. Since the war has not been officially ended, there are remaining threats and conflicts between the nations. Every man is infringed upon their freedom and impelled in the military for almost two years to protect their country. If this was not mandatory, the nation’s military powers will be significantly weakened and thus lead to an increase in the vulnerability of citizens.
To conclude, the issue of whether one’s freedom can be inhibited in some circumstances is complex. Some believe that freedom must be protected in any chances. However, I still contend that freedom can be limited in particular cases. To protect others and the community or the nation, one’s freedom can be controlled.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, still, thus, well, while, as to, for example, i think, in particular, such as, first of all, in my opinion, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1866.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12637362637 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76536884033 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527472527473 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.6973376828 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.8181818182 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5454545455 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95454545455 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19152404732 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0611766690869 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534901734476 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120483435657 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0251821548632 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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