In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important contributions.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Some people adhere to the idea that beginners are lucky and may have find a propitious breakthrough or ingenious answer to difficult problems. However, I mostly disagree with the idea that beginner is more likely to come up with major contributions than expert in most of the fields of study. I will support my argument with two reasons.
First of all, solid background of knowledge and years of experience are necessarily required to any kinds of field. In other words, without knowing the basics and low-level concepts or without having enough experiences in the field, it is difficult to advance and develop the status-quo to a new level. For instance, many renown professors create major and significant contributions to the academia more often as they age. Comparing masters to Ph.D. students, Ph.D. students come up with more contributions. Assistant professors write more significant papers then Ph.D. students. More experienced professors contribute to the academia by the most important contributions which effects hugely to the field. This can be witnessed by the numbers of publications and numbers of citation of those papers gradually increases to most of the people in academia.
Second of all, in order to make important contributions to a field, a person must have perseverance and zealousness. Any person whether he or she is a novice or an expert, have to focus and devote their time and energy completely on the subject to bring a new solution or idea. Although a beginner can be hugely interested on the field, the person must continue to spend efforts and have interest in the field to solve a problem which eventually makes the man or women become an expert of the field. For instance, to figure out what is a radioactive matter, Marie Curie boiled hundreds types of rocks for days without sleeping. She tried to find out the radioactive material by empirically going through hundreds of materials and eventually discovered Radon. This goes by same with Edison, who tried numerous kinds of materials to find the appropriate material to use as a filament to lighten up the light bulb. As he said, major breakthrough is composed of 99% of sweat (effort) and 1% of ingeniousity.
To conclude, beginners might have a different point of view and present a brilliant idea where existing people could not have thought of. Nevertheless, I strongly believe that to increase the chance of making important contributions, a sturdy background and perseverance to keep studying about the field is required more than other factors. Indeed, the society and academia is developed by persistent, hard-working scholars who spend and sacrifice their life to the field.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 70, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'found'.
Suggestion: found
...a that beginners are lucky and may have find a propitious breakthrough or ingenious ...
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Line 2, column 560, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...rofessors write more significant papers then Ph.D. students. More experienced profes...
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Line 3, column 925, Rule ID: MAJOR_BREAKTHROUGH[1]
Message: Use simply 'breakthrough'.
Suggestion: breakthrough
... lighten up the light bulb. As he said, major breakthrough is composed of 99% of sweat effort and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, then, for instance, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2237.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 438.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10730593607 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95920797949 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520547945205 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 694.8 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2119824808 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.85 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.21951772744 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204365083571 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.059350844097 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601118112678 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124300940328 0.150359130593 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278291438329 0.0667264976115 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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