TPO-01 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.Use specific reaso

Students along with their hard lessons and critical examinations, need a useful time to relax and release their minds, so how great is it, if they have a place in their educational environment for sports and social activities that are free for them.

First, nowadays the large number of people take care about their health to have a good shape too, I because it’s so important to have self-confident also be healthy always is important, so have complete free gym in educational places are very necessary and helpful. I remember that I was in university we had a huge stadium for playing women soccer and at the first I didn’t like it but after my training finish I really enjoyed it, and lose my extra weight and it’s improve my shape and after 2 years we won lots of reward and that saved by far the much funniest time, I’ve ever had.

Second, when the students want to use outdoor gyms they should pay too much money and some of them can’t pay it anymore, so what should they do? they need some free place to use it, and it should have most of the common kinds of sports like as horse riding, score, volleyball, basketball, tennis and etc. I started a horse riding from school and in Iran it cost too much and I couldn’t afford it but my school had a place to teach me and after that I started my first race match and won my first gold when I was 10 years old and I’m very thankful of my school.

Third, working on social subjects like as working on acting on university theaters are interesting and it will help their social communities to works as groups and be successes. I remember a great memory about, I wrote a movie text and I made a group to acted it and that was a fantastic comedy and all the viewers enjoyed so much.

In conclusion, the educational places should pay attention to all sides of students need to grow up because they spend most of their whole life in schools, and it doesn’t any differences between lessons like as chemistry or math and arts or sports, all the students in the world need both of them to complete each other, to take rest and have fun insides of studding.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...pay it anymore, so what should they do? they need some free place to use it, and it ...
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Line 5, column 302, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
..., score, volleyball, basketball, tennis and etc. I started a horse riding from school an...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... and all the viewers enjoyed so much. In conclusion, the educational places sh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, so, third, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 13.8261648746 210% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1763.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50895140665 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52010446959 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521739130435 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6003584229 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 43.0 20.1344086022 214% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.4151865664 48.9658058833 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 195.888888889 100.406767564 195% => OK
Words per sentence: 43.4444444444 20.6045352989 211% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 6.88888888889 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0609863357001 0.236089414692 26% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0295224585461 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0231803349778 0.0737576698707 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0367648975857 0.150856017488 24% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0164253377263 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.5 11.7677419355 183% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 10.1575268817 174% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.77 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 10.002688172 195% => OK
gunning_fog: 19.2 10.0537634409 191% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.247311828 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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