It is indisputable that some natural talents have a pivotal role in development of an advancement for individuals. Having natural abilities such as a high IQ, creative characteristics and so forth means that the nature has already paved the way for you in a specific rout. However, a controversial question just come in mind that would it make any sense that these talents, specifically leadership, come naturally or one can grasp it through learning? People, nevertheless, have different perspectives. Some of them, I am sure would believe that these skills are supposed to be only natural, whereas others disagree. In my point of view, definitely there should be chances to grasp a talent even if you are deprived naturally from it. I would like to elaborate on my view and especially around leadership, by giving two examples.
To begin with, it is obvious that people with their totally complex brains are capable of learning anything to get any positions, even subjects that are seem to be super-intricate and impossible. A well-known proverb here seems beneficial to be expressed: only impossible is impossible. The only factor that may differ from one person to another is that some of them probably are equipped with different speeds of getting and processing the information. In other word, it may take longer to be a leader than for a talented person (a person who has leadership features naturally). A good example for this claim can be a true story from my own life. I use to have a cousin who desired to be alone and doing some trivial jobs during his life. He had never enjoyed meetings or group work. He used to escape all the responsibilities that are vital for a person to be considered as a leader. Eventually, about ten years ago, when he went to Tehran for finding a job, he visited a shoe factory in which more than two hundred workers were working. He was surprised by the accuracy and prudent work of each worker in that factory. He states that he was extremely stimulated by the management of the factory. After two year working there, he decided to start his own business, a shoe manufacturing company. He, nevertheless, was illiterate. Indeed, he had learnt so many things from his boss and the essential information to be a successful leader had been grasped. Now, he is one of the best shoe manufacturers over the country and leads more than 350 artisans. This story taught me that the only barrier to get a position or to learn a specific subject is your own negative feed backs.
Moreover, sometimes we observe better outcomes from a person who does not have the talent. Lack of a natural ability will limit you and leaves you with some question that can be really encouraging. One of those questions is that why I cannot reach what I want? Actually, there is no answer for this question except that you need to be stronger and strive if you really want that. Whenever, a person gets this answer he knows that why he is needed to be more persistent. At the end of the story of these people they are stronger than people who reached the same position counting mainly on their natural ability. Consequently, the quality of the prior people can be expected to be higher.
In conclusion, being prudent and considering both natural leaders and desired leaders, it is readily perceived that not only all people can learn any subject they want, but also these people usually do better than natural leaders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'seemed'.
Suggestion: seemed
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...can be a true story from my own life. I use to have a cousin who desired to be alon...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, really, so, well, whereas, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 37.0 15.1003584229 245% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.0286738351 227% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2842.0 1977.66487455 144% => OK
No of words: 595.0 407.700716846 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77647058824 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93888872473 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77917340518 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 315.0 212.727598566 148% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529411764706 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 910.8 618.680645161 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5126017844 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.6774193548 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1935483871 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.54838709677 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0475353747731 0.236089414692 20% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.012891646373 0.076458572812 17% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0199211904169 0.0737576698707 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0325408263843 0.150856017488 22% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0141445027807 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 86.8835125448 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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