Nobody will deny the importance of sports and social activities. In fact, we should encourage universities and colleges to make their students do several activities beside studying. However, I believe it is too far to say that sports and social activities should receive equal financial support at schools.
The main reason I claim so is because the main purpose of universities and colleges is to make students learn and research. When people graduate from school we expect them to increase their knowledge, make scientific improvement and become a professional in their own field. Even though outside activities are important, schools should not withdraw money improving laboratories and buying more books at the library for bigger soccer fields. Universities and colleges should put their priority on education more than anything else.
Another reason is because it might be just a waste of money. There are other ways people can enjoy sports and social activities such as sport centers like YMCA or social clubs for music and art. Thus even if schools enhance their sports facility students might not even care about it. For example, my university had a gym that could fit about 20 people inside. A few people used the gym so the school concluded the reason for that was because the gym was too small. They renovated the gym to fit about 50 people, however, the amount of people using the gym did not increase as much. They found out that most of the students were using the gym off-campus and realized that they made a mistake. It would of been much better if they just invested that money on more scientific research.
All in all, because the main reason that universities exist is not for out-door activities and investing on them could be just a waste of money I believe that schools should focus more on spending money for classes and libraries.
Essay evaluation report
comments:
You may put one more reason. Other reasons/examples are good enough, and sentences are developed smoothly.
also you may do more reading and know more words, look:
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 314 350
No. of Characters: 1514 1500
No. of Different Words: 166 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.21 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.822 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.478 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 110 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.836 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.333 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.524 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.117 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 197, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...YMCA or social clubs for music and art. Thus even if schools enhance their sports fa...
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Line 5, column 698, Rule ID: MODAL_OF[1]
Message: It's never correct to use "of" after a modal verb. Use 'would have', or, in informal register, 'would've'.
Suggestion: would have; would've
...d realized that they made a mistake. It would of been much better if they just invested ...
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Line 7, column 232, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ending money for classes and libraries.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, thus, as to, for example, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1554.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 314.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94904458599 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5343115835 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519108280255 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7361939803 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.125 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.625 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6875 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169366319904 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0622800928529 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0695839212062 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128595566357 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0942430672923 0.0645574589148 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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