Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Parents are the best teachers.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
During one’s life we learn a lot and there are many teachers such as our friends, school teachers and parents that teach us lessons. With all the various teachers we have in our life who is the best teacher we could have? In my own honest opinion parents are the best.
The first reason I believe so is because parents are the ones that know most of us. Because they know about their children more than other people they have a better chance knowing their son/daughter’s true drawback and how to fix it. To illustrate this point with my own experience, when I was in middle school my math grades were not matching up to the effort I put into. Most of my friends and my teachers thought that my poor math grades were just because I was not good enough. However, my parents knew it was not because of may lack of math skills but my fear of taking test that hindered me from getting the best grade. After getting lots of advice to not panic during tests I began to score the highest grades in math.
Another reason I believe that parents are the best teacher is because they are the few people to care about us to improve. Most people don’t give much of an attention to others to care about their flaws. For example, when I was young I had a habit of saying bad words. Most of my friends and others thought that it was funny and did not care much to fix it. It was my parents that constantly trying to fix my habit. Due to their persistent effort I was able to fix my bad habit. This example shows that parents are the few people that are willing to put that effort to make me a better person.
To sum up, because parents know about their child more than anyone else and they have the love and care to do whatever it takes to make their child a better person I believe that parents should be considered the best teachers people have.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
school teachers and parents that teach us lessons.
school teachers and parents who teach us lessons.
parents are the ones that know most of us.
parents are the ones who know most of us.
It was my parents that constantly trying to fix my habit.
It was my parents who constantly are trying to fix my habits.
are the few people that are willing to put that effort
are the few people who are willing to put that effort
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flaws:
1. contents are duplicated, for example:
The first reason I believe so is because parents are the ones that know most of us
revised:
First, parents are the ones that know most of us
Another reason I believe that parents are the best teacher is because they are the few people to care about us to improve.
revised:
second, they are the few people to care about us to improve.
2. better not to use personal examples always. One personal example is enough. If not, you are going to use a lot of pronouns as the subject of sentences. like: "I". look:
when
I was in middle school my math grades were not matching up to the effort
I put into. Most of my friends and my teachers thought that
my poor math grades were just because
I was not good enough.
3. Try to put more content with 3 reasons. More content also means higher scores.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 19 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 351 350
No. of Characters: 1455 1500
No. of Different Words: 160 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.328 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.145 4.6
Word Length SD: 1.99 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 90 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 55 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 17 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 7 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.647 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.918 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.294 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.378 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.541 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.185 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 275, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...wn honest opinion parents are the best. The first reason I believe so is becaus...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 633, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...indered me from getting the best grade. After getting lots of advice to not panic dur...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to score the highest grades in math. Another reason I believe that parents a...
^^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...at effort to make me a better person. To sum up, because parents know about t...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, so, for example, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1506.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.31518624642 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.19695111433 2.67179642975 82% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.458452722063 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 458.1 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2054900668 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5882352941 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5294117647 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.82352941176 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111770353847 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0465083054698 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0488434687509 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0793163705532 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0158093632397 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 58.1214874552 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.78 10.9000537634 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.35 8.01818996416 79% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 86.8835125448 44% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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