Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People are never satisfied with what they have; they always want something more or something different. Use specific reasons to support your answer.
Is it possible to be happy with what you have? Or will people always crave for bigger and better stuff and never be satisfied with what they possess? If I were to answer the question I would say that it is extremely difficult for people to be satisfied with what they have.
To begin with, no matter how special a thing or a situation is people tend to get bored with it. No matter how delightful they were when they got something after time past people find something that is more advanced and different. To illustrate this point with my own experience, when I was in middle school I always wanted a playstation3. I gathered small amount of money every day and it took me about 6 months to finally be able to afford the console. When I first bought the playstation3 it was so special not just because of its entertainment feature but also it showed my hard work to get it. However, after a couple of years past I played most of the games and I was getting tired of playing with it. At that point I was looking for a different game system to replace my playstation3. It is surprising how easily I got bored with my console considering what it meant to me. It just shows why people cannot be happy with one thing forever.
Moreover, people constantly compare with other people and if what they have or their situation is not better than others, people tend to starve for more. This happens with grades, money, appearance etc. Even if getting a 90 out of 100 is a great grade people are not satisfied with it because their friend got a 95. Even if one's salary is decent they want more if their co-worker gets more money than him or her. Then again even when people are in a similar condition compared to others they tend to envy what others have that they don't. Like one might have beautiful eyes, however, they still envy their friend's tall height. Just like the saying goes "The grass is greener on the other side of the fence".
To sum up, people cannot constantly have the same enthusiasm they have with what they have and they cannot stop comparing with others. Because of that people will never be satisfied with what they have in hand and will always look for something better.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
1. the personal example is relatively long. This will generate a lot of pronouns. look:
when
I was in middle school
I always wanted a playstation3.
I gathered small amount of money every day and it took me about 6 months to finally be able to afford the console. When
I first bought the playstation3 it was so special not just because of its entertainment feature but also it showed my hard work to get it. However, after a couple of years past
I played most of the games and
I was getting tired of playing with it. At that point
I was looking for a different game system to replace my playstation3. It is surprising how easily
I got bored with my console considering what it meant to me.
better to use a shorter example, but add one more reason.
2. Unique words percentage is low.
Unique words percentage: 0.485074626866 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
it is less than average, so the e-grade gave a low mark. though you will get a higher mark in actual exam for this essay.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 403 350
No. of Characters: 1748 1500
No. of Different Words: 196 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.48 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.337 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.272 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 107 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 59 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 37 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.211 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.346 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.332 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.516 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.102 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 326, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... because their friend got a 95. Even if ones salary is decent they want more if thei...
^^^^
Line 5, column 534, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...tend to envy what others have that they dont. Like one might have beautiful eyes, ho...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, look, moreover, so, still, then, thus, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1802.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48258706468 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35600375514 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485074626866 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 549.9 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.767989205 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.8095238095 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1428571429 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.90476190476 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.401056409854 0.236089414692 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132845022103 0.076458572812 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101319545509 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.291491478941 0.150856017488 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0826545076525 0.0645574589148 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.86 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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