TPO-01 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.Use specific reaso

i believe this is true concept because sports can perform good way in improving health problem between students. these exercises can improve students way of thinking and challenges. Beside that, social activities are the best way in preparing students for social environment. some sports are also not cheap and some social activities need more financial support than the other trivial one

First of all, sports and social activities can improve health as well as creativity. in fact, the more students exercises the more their mind can handle difficult problems. in other words, creativity needs both classes and science books in library and an appropriate health condition. for example, when i was in the college dormitory i tried to do exercises each weekend. this helped me to be on healthy condition so that i could focus on my research better than before.

Another reason is that social activities can prepare students for future jobs. people in future need to communicate with each other in order to gain the best response in their researches. for instance, there are so many factories around the world that their idea was established first in the academic environment.

the last reason is that some sports are not cheap and some social activities need more financial support than the other trivial one. as a mater of fact, a lot of students prefer the other sports rather than playing with trivial one that do not need any further cost or the basic equipments are already exists. on the other hand, many social activities need found to provide student a place for increasing their experiences. for example, a journey around the city or country or a international discussion conference need more money in comparison to trivial activities.

in conclusion, i prefer the government uses financial supports for sports and social activities in the same level as the library and classes need rather than cut down these financial aids.

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Average: 6.3 (1 vote)
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'if', 'so', 'well', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'in fact', 'as well as', 'first of all', 'in other words', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.286956521739 0.229887763892 125% => OK
Verbs: 0.121739130435 0.158761421928 77% => OK
Adjectives: 0.130434782609 0.0866891130778 150% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0405797101449 0.046263068375 88% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0173913043478 0.0685040099705 25% => Some pronouns wanted.
Prepositions: 0.133333333333 0.118717715034 112% => OK
Participles: 0.0173913043478 0.0351676179071 49% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.64758365253 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0173913043478 0.0309702414327 56% => OK
Particles: 0.00289855072464 0.00188951952338 153% => OK
Determiners: 0.110144927536 0.0887237588012 124% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0173913043478 0.0209618222197 83% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00869565217391 0.0139019557991 63% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1950.0 2387.08602151 82% => OK
No of words: 319.0 408.028673835 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.11285266458 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.48200974243 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.379310344828 0.338922669872 112% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.275862068966 0.251872472559 110% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.175548589342 0.174417080927 101% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.134796238245 0.112833075102 119% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64758365253 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489028213166 0.524397521467 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 49.2905531254 59.2087087015 83% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6684587814 77% => OK
Sentence length: 19.9375 20.5533526081 97% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.1854029702 48.84282405 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.875 120.699889404 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9375 20.5533526081 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.8125 0.644075263715 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 5.54480286738 397% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 47.5237068966 45.7405998639 104% => OK
Elegance: 2.43548387097 1.45489161554 167% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246890101203 0.300154397459 82% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.106529760771 0.103427244359 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.062616773052 0.0752933317313 83% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.521441031721 0.497263757937 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.153580947874 0.151897553556 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0990550935968 0.114077575197 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0888728049974 0.0781384742642 114% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.325121300541 0.336927656856 96% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0162242457094 0.067059652881 24% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178584338436 0.210909579961 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.068397100567 0.0618886996521 111% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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