TPO 01- At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
In general, people agree with the fact that budget of universities and colleges remain limited. But how to spend the budget has always been a matter of controversy or should I say this is where the agreement stops. A plethora of people believe that the main mission of universities and colleges is to provide students with an environment in which they can merely increase their information and boost their knowledge. That is why classes and libraries deserve to get the whole financial support. In contrast to this conviction, others are of the opinion that sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. I personally think that the latter carries more weight and in the following essay, I will try to explain my reasons which I believe are the most common viewpoints among people.
The first and most exquisite point to be mentioned is that doing sports helps people feel refreshed. No one could cast doubt on the fact that sports improve people's health both mentally and physically. Since we should talk about sports in a university context, let us examine what benefits they would probably have to students. Studying could be overwhelming especially after a long time. Thus, learners need to be fresh again and feel revived. This is where doing sports comes into play and helps students when they frustrated. According to a recent research paper publish in the journal of "The Prosperity" 2015 April, students engaged in sports at least 30 minutes a day will end up grasping information more quickly and more efficiently which will result in better academic performances that lead to getting more decent jobs in their future career.
Another reason to substantiate my standpoint is concerned with the issue that participating in social activities is beneficial to learners in terms of promoting the development of their social skills such as communication skills, arrangement skills, and spirit of teamwork. As an illustration, I considered myself shy when I was a university student back in 2000s. Majoring in software engineering, I always had trouble presenting my seminars before my fellow students. That is why my presentations did not seem appealing to others and my scores never improved. It was until I decided to take part an English club and it worked like a charm. As everyone who was a member of that club was obliged to narrate a story in English every week, I tried to do my best to enhance my narration and make my stories look attractive in order to elicit my audience's attention. Gradually, I felt I was progressing toward that goal and after a while I had no trouble conveying my thoughts and communicating with other people whatsoever. Furthermore, my self-confidence also improved remarkably to some extent that I was appointed as representative of my department (Electrical and Computer engineering) for the annual competitions of Artificial Intelligence projects. As you can see, participating in social activities is a contributing factor in terms of enhancing students' social capabilities.
In a nutshell, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that at universities and colleges, students should have facilities in order to promote their health physically and mentally while studying their lessons. Moreover, as human beings, they need to be able to eliminate their possible weaknesses in social areas thereby taking advantage of upcoming situations in their future life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 20, Rule ID: AGREE_WITH_THE_FACT[1]
Message: Use simply 'agree that'.
Suggestion: agree that
In general, people agree with the fact that budget of universities and colleges rem...
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Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 2000s'.
Suggestion: in the 2000s
...hy when I was a university student back in 2000s. Majoring in software engineering, I al...
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Line 3, column 1155, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...inted as representative of my department Electrical and Computer engineering for...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ent Electrical and Computer engineering for the annual competitions of Artificia...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, look, moreover, so, thus, while, at least, in contrast, in general, such as, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2952.0 1977.66487455 149% => OK
No of words: 567.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20634920635 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87972968509 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08071026456 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 309.0 212.727598566 145% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544973544974 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 909.9 618.680645161 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.1037851587 48.9658058833 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.0 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.625 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208415247937 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602843139882 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112911912364 0.0737576698707 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128288927901 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.09577877907 0.0645574589148 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 148.0 86.8835125448 170% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
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Write the essay in 30 minutes. We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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