Human beings are social animals. In the society, humans create relationships with each other and benefit from those relationships. However, in terms of creating relationships, every person has their own criteria in selecting people. For example, some people are willing to make relationships with attractive people, and others will prefer smart people. Especially, some people puts honesty as the most important consideration when building relationships with other people because they could benefit and create stronger relationship with people who always tell the truth. However, I disagree with the statement that telling the truth is the most important factor in creating and maintaining relationships. This is because first, sometimes telling the truth may cause conflict. Also, in order to carry on a long and pleasant conversation, a little bit of exaggeration and hypocrisy is needed.
To begin with, sometimes telling the truth will negatively impact one's relationship. The truth may be confronting that you don't want other people to know about and might affect your relationship with others For example, I am currently in a good and healthy physical shape. However, in the past, I was quite chubby and was bullied because of my appearance. If I told the truth and everybody knew about my past, some people will find it uncomfortable and effect my relationships. Also, you may want to create and maintain good relationships with others by lying intentionally. As an example, a few days ago, me and my friends received our half yearly reports. But, my friend did not achieve an competent score while I almost topped every single subject. My friend was almost crying of despair and ask me how i did on the exams. If I said I got good scores in the exams, he would think I was boasting and making fun of his bad grades. Therefore, in order to relief his grief and to tell he was not the only one that did bad, I lied and said I got bad marks. As a result, he felt better and we were able to maintain good relationships ever since. Sometimes not telling the truth is important in relationship between people.
In addition, telling lies may be essential in order to bridge the gap between each other. This is because while in order to get closer in relationships, it is important to sympathize with each others. However people have different ideas and thoughts we sometimes have to lie and pretend to sympathize with other people. For example, during a blind date, me and my partner went to see a romance movie. Although I did not enjoy the movie, I told her that it so sweet and fantastic to get closer to her. Furthermore, telling lies or exaggerated expressions will help you have a smooth conversations with others. As an example, I often exaggerate or fake my emotions while talking to my friend. If I be too honest, the the flow of the conversation may be disrupted. Therefore, sometimes faking yourself is important.
To sum up, I believe that lies often help you make and keep relationships with other because telling the truth might be offensive to each other. What's more, exaggerating or faking your thoughts helps you have stronger relationships with other people as you can pretend to agree with others and have a smooth conversation. Although untruth is not what you should pursuit, being too honest makes relationships difficult.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
... on a long and pleasant conversation, a little bit of exaggeration and hypocrisy is needed...
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...elling the truth will negatively impact ones relationship. The truth may be confront...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
.... The truth may be confronting that you dont want other people to know about and mig...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...reports. But, my friend did not achieve an competent score while I almost topped e...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...almost crying of despair and ask me how i did on the exams. If I said I got good ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...portant to sympathize with each others. However people have different ideas and thought...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'conversation'?
Suggestion: conversation
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
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Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2791.0 1977.66487455 141% => OK
No of words: 564.0 407.700716846 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94858156028 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87326216964 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90817492412 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468085106383 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 854.1 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.0514712722 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.21875 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.625 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1875 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205306645936 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602135622736 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730147232787 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140490807299 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511488798337 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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