TPO-03 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today’s world technology make it easy for people to make new friends or keep in touch with their old friends. There are recent debates over whether making new friends will benefit people for enjoying their life or not. Different people hold various views due to their distinct backgrounds and perspectives. Some people may the opinion that it is better for you build a new relationship with new individuals but other have a negative attitude. As a matter of fact, the issue of making new friend is so complicated and controversial that it is impossible to find a universal answer to this question. Nevertheless, I endorse that, to some extend keeping old friends is more important than creating a new one. In order to substantiate my vantage points, I would like to address some key evidences; our old friends understand us better and they try to help us with our obstacles, and also; old friends are reliable and you can trust them.
In the first place, trust between you and your old friend are so potent that you can share your problem with them. For example, when I was in university, one time my boyfriend did not call me for two weeks and I was worried. Although, my boyfriend had been a business trip and was not able to give me a call, my new roommate told me that he probably is in love with someone else and has left you forever so I thought that maybe she is right and when my boyfriend came back, our relationship got into trouble. After that I am worried to make new friends and tell them about my life.
Along the same line, another privilege of the aforementioned idea; old friends know your characteristics and are able to give you an appropriate advice when you have a problem. It takes a long time to new friends to get to know your behavior. Thereby, they could not provide you good guides and sometimes may give you a bad advice. For instance, my field of study is genetics and when I was about to select a subject for my thesis in my masters, my friend Ali who had been my classmate since high school suggested me that you should select a subject about quantitative genetics that works with statistical software and programs. Now I am successful in my career the credit for this goes to my friend who guided me well.
To put the issue into perspective, by taking into account these entire aspects, old friends will definitely give you more opportunities when you need advice and have a problem. Thereby, you are more successful with their guide.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 645, Rule ID: SOME_EXTEND[1]
Message: Did you mean 'extent' ("extent" is a noun, "extend" is a verb)?
Suggestion: extent
.... Nevertheless, I endorse that, to some extend keeping old friends is more important t...
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Line 3, column 318, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'bad advice'.
Suggestion: bad advice
... good guides and sometimes may give you a bad advice. For instance, my field of study is gen...
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Line 4, column 151, Rule ID: GIVE_ADVISE[4]
Message: Did you mean 'advise' (a verb)?
Suggestion: advise
...ve you more opportunities when you need advice and have a problem. Thereby, you are mo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, nevertheless, so, well, for example, for instance, as a matter of fact, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2041.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6072234763 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65380394466 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507900677201 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.9468394248 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.388888889 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6111111111 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249678835013 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0977220183006 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0660640930769 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158090261505 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0560072612874 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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