TPO-05 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.Use specific reasons and examples to suppo

It is not true that the privileges of the new age we live in has changed the hardships of life or its struggles in any substantial way. In our age, one still spends more of his or her time doing what’s necessary to simply get by. All the various forms of entertainment, while varied and more prominent in our era, still could not substitute the various obligatory activities of one’s life.

Consider what the advent of television, and later, personal computers and internet have brought us. They have simply exposed us to a bigger picture, and by doing so, in many ways, they have attracted our attention to the more important matters in life. In the past, if one were to choose to live a simple life, it would have been more than easy for him. By choosing seclusion, he would have the opportunity to focus much more easily on his own hobbies. He wouldn’t have the need to concern himself with a wider network of people, their peculiar relationships and the things that are expected to happen in said relationships. In other words, he had fewer commitments and duties. Thus, the mere scope of our new age has doubled one’s responsibilities.

Furthermore, while it is true that there is relatively a wider range of entertainment sources available in this new age, arguably, as a result of the development of more advanced technologies, people are engaged in more time-consuming and demanding tasks. Clearly, we are not addressing the physical endeavors of the modern age, but the mental preparation needed, to face the ever-present technological aspects now concerned even with the mundane tasks of the past. Agriculture, transportation and many other fields have been completely revolutionized by the advancements in technology in ways that require one to fully engross him or herself in aspects of life completely alien to people of previous generations. But all of this is clearly needed in order to keep up with the technologically advanced world and its people.

All of this, contribute to a situation where an individual no longer spends nearly as much of his or her time, doing what he or she would consider entertainment. The necessity of exposing one’s self to new methods and emerging solutions every day has, in turn limited one’s possibilities to designate a great portion of his or her time to him or herself.

In concluding, I believe that while it’s true that many of the tasks of this age seem rather deviated from the responsibilities that one would undertake in a previous era, they all are necessary and do not at all, hold any entertainment value. Rather, they are essential tasks suited for this era, and the complexities that we face in this new age, have contributed to a situation where one spends, in fact, more time, on the more important issues in life and less time on entertainment and related matters.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, so, still, thus, while, in fact, as a result, in other words, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2396.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 484.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95041322314 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07427185893 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506198347107 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 767.7 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.1204013092 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.111111111 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8888888889 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22222222222 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143138558848 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0468363978558 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523516838476 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0860803489136 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0316974105116 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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