' Time is a gold. If you spend it to wrong things, it will never be back. ' In contemporary society, role of education is increasing but unemployment is increasing like that and unemployment is become most pressing issue of world. I personally think agree with the statement that ' People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment- doing things they like- rather than doing things they should do.' for several reasons.
First of all, most celebrities suggest to teenagers to do things what you like not force you to do things that you do not want to because of their own life experiences. For example, famous singer Selena Gomez said that ' Do the things what you want to do' in her video. After watch the video, I think it would be better to do thing that I love because I could have a lot of enjoyment and I could succeed.
Second of all, in modern society unemployment is increasing with speed of light. Due to that the number of divorced family is increasing and the children are hate their parents and do not want to take their suggestion. Moreover, children are do things only for enjoyment. As a result, they ruin their life because of their family.
Third of all, from the wrong mentality of public, people became more lazier and want live an easy way such as robbery. In twentieth century, people were want to know about their world, society and other things. However, modern people do not want to know about life, they only want to live an easy way then die. I think it is most powerful matter of the statement that is given first.
To sum up, due to a lot of issues people waste their golden time for only the enjoyment. Technology development is make our life easier but it is influence our life badly. I disagree with the statement for the reasons mentioned previously.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...le, famous singer Selena Gomez said that Do the things what you want to do in her...
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Message: Use only 'lazier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: lazier
...rong mentality of public, people became more lazier and want live an easy way such as robbe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, then, third, for example, i think, such as, as a result, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1472.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 319.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6144200627 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47015578423 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498432601881 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 449.1 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.9932631458 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.4736842105 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7894736842 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.68421052632 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.431980677455 0.236089414692 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122802477026 0.076458572812 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.173568703946 0.0737576698707 235% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23696712216 0.150856017488 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.168053732014 0.0645574589148 260% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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