TPO-05 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.Use specific reasons and examples to suppo

There is no doubt that anybody without regarding his age can make his life better and synthesis the reasons of happiness. However, I think that the young people have the abilities to enjoy their life rather than the older. Someone can consciously weigh the pros and cons of each side. The explanations go as follows.

First, the young people are energetic and have a better heath than the older people. So, they are capable of practicing a lot of sporting games. For example, at the last family journey to Sharm El-sheikh. The guide of the journey lists a variety of entertainments that the journey management introduced to the members. For example, the aqua handball game and climbing the mountains. I have noticed that all the participating at such activities were young people. But the older people have chosen to stay watching them.

Second, the young people are better follower to the new technology than the older people. For instance, my dad prefers to spend his free time reading magazines or newspaper but I feel that is very boring. I used to access the internet and follow the social media and sign up at many websites for example, fashion, movie, news and scientific websites. I think that knowing the events and the new is more interesting than watching TV or reading books. Also, the new smart phones have many of applications like games or learning cooking applications. So, I can make myself enjoy all the time.

Third, the young people prefer the change but the older people prefer the quietness and stability. For example, I participate at journey organization community that used to organize journeys overseas. I used to join most of the journeys; really it is very exciting to visit other places and countries. I have met a lot of people from different cultures and had a lot of experience about different societies. In addition to that I have seen many historical buildings like the Pyramids in Egypt and Great Wall of China. I think that I enjoyed my life compared with my parents that prefer to stay most of the time at house garden.

Due to the aforementioned reasons, I believe that the youngsters have the ability to enjoy their life better than the old
people.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 527, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to cook'.
Suggestion: to cook
... of applications like games or learning cooking applications. So, I can make myself enj...
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Line 9, column 122, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to enjoy their life better than the old people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, regarding, second, so, third, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, in addition, no doubt

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1827.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84615384615 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64217079235 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506631299735 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.1171902737 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.125 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7083333333 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.58333333333 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.083125644323 0.236089414692 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0245587779285 0.076458572812 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0236230200613 0.0737576698707 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.049263740546 0.150856017488 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0132133996487 0.0645574589148 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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